by Eutopia
...but watch the spelling. Spelling mistakes take the reader out of the zone. A spell checker doesn't know what you mean if you know the sound of the word, but not the spelling. A thesaurus is a big help. Examples: shoot/chute, pealing/peeling, clamber/clamour.
So erotic!!! Please give us more from Vul and Sophie!!!! Thanks
Makes me want to sign up for that duty! more please!
What a great story. Looking forward to more of Sophie and Vul.
there would be a lot less fucking around I'll bet heh
You actually cared enough to spell correctly. It ruins the story when I have to try to decipher what your intent is when you can't be bothered to spell correctly.
Lastly, size 'E' breasts? really?
ok looved that story. Would love to see more of them. i was also confused over E sized breasts.
I like that this story is not just a Porn Without Plot.
The sex was hot!
I'd love to read more about Sophie and Vul.
What's up with the bewilderment of two of the commenters below about E-cup breasts? NZ E-cup = US DDD/E (UK F)
Loved the story! Yes, a few typos, but nothing too atrocious or inhibiting. Would definitely read more about Vul and Sophie
As for the confusion over cup sizes: I know size E sounds like it stands for enormous, but I have a few friends who wear an E-cup and it's really not that big, especially when the wearer in question isn't a size 0. Though it's apparently a pain to find good bras, it is a perfectly normal and common enough boob size. Get over it.
I've been coming back, but thiers no new one, are you still going to do it? D-:
Really dig the story! I'm usually EXTREMELY skeptical of any erotic story that tries to slap some character on its characters, because much of the time it ends up horribly done with two paragraphs of fucking sandwiched in five pages of stiff, unrealistic dialogue about college classes and troo luv in quasi-script format making me waste twenty minutes of my life that could have been spent reading something badass like THIS! Keep being awesome!
On a critical note, right out of the gate, the writing seemed to struggle a little, and it kinda felt like, I dunno, like you were trying a little too hard to prove your character, Sophie, was different, that she DEFINITELY wasn't a Sue how could you say such a thing. You seemed to go out of your way to downplay her appearance, and describe her hair as "average." Stay with me though, as soon as the story got rollin' a little more, I could kinda tell when you got more comfortable with what you were writing, because that's when Sophie's imperfections stopped feeling forced and she as a character started feeling real. She's obviously a character you've taken the time to really flesh out, and that's fantastic. Did I mention the dialogue was good? It was realistic, and that... Wow, what an amazing breath of fresh air it was. Then the story kept being awesome and intense until right about Val's replaying of Sophie's really intense break down moment(s). This is a double-sided blade. Being a long-time roleplayer m'self, I could sorta tell that this was a part that you were a little apprehensive about doing, but you punched your fear in the face and hurled yourself right into the challenge. Good on ya! You had a lot of passion and a lot of emotion and you're very fond of your characters, which is great. Unfortunately, the crazy displays were a little overboard, breaking the suspension of disbelief. BUT THEN. You got finished with that and on to the bathing scene, which was sooooo well done omgggg, the way you specified things made it REAL, man, and it was NOT the trite shit I end up half-heartedly reading all the time when I search "tentacles." Dude, this stuff was DIFFERENT. This had stuff that I NEVER SEE EVER in other stories. It had... intimacy? Not sure if that's the right word, but something like that. The petals-thing was definitely badass and the way you kept using them was very creative, and Val kept internally making these "She's the captain, who am I to [whatever]" remarks and it was spaced perfectly and it wasn't too frequent or predictable while still being like "Whoa this really smart computer guy character is AWESOME and totally like a really smart computer guy character," which, lemme tell you, is really fucking impressive.
In conclusion, I know this is an erotic story but it's also a really good story-story with actual characters and stuff so I feel obligated to leave like, real feedback and encouragement. More Sophie and Val would totally be fantastic, and I really hope you write more.
It's something about this story that makes me want to come back, and read it all over again, I can't explain about how amazing this is! Even the others! I just wish that for a great Author that you would continue but thats up to you if you want to continue it.
Damn! Intimacy is really difficult to write between two PEOPLE, never mind a woman and a machine. A very good story. Enjoyed it all the way through. Although the typo's were a little distracting. Easy to miss when writing. Spellcheck should sort that out for ya. Keep writing!!
Will this story have a saga, like Vul giving Sophie some TLC in bed or on other parts of the ship, giving her anal, penetrating her 2/ 3 holes, developing a lover/pervert like personality, groping, enticing stimulating & seducing Sophie to further explore and avail his services or giving her a scheduled service or both becoming sexually playful. Nevertheless I hope it has a continuation... ^^
Would absolutely love to see more of this ! Keep up the good work~
I love you for writing this !!!! Easily the best thing I've read so far on this site xD Would love more :3
I gotta say this is the first story on this site that I've found to be appealing then the others I have read, it is a fantastic read with the plot being entertaining enough even without knowing it could get erotic (although the build up makes it all the more better) Can't wait to check out the rest of your work!
I am not usually one for tentacles, but this story has me wanting more. Please continue with the series!
This is soo good that I wouldn't mind seeing more vul and Sophie actually I want more cal and Sophie
God I'm so glad I found this again. Its my favorite story on here of all time. Its beautiful.