All Comments on 'A Case of Mistaken Identity'

by Scorpio44

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
good story and please write more

your stories are always fun to read.give us more in the future.

PEATBOGPEATBOGalmost 17 years ago
Brilliant!!!

Yet another glimpse of Scorpio44's brilliance! A very entertaining tale of love, albeit incestuous, overcoming the odds to give us a happy ending. I feel sorry for his Ex. Since you give no evidence of her 'cheating'. As I read it, she divorced him when he was sent to China! Sorry, I have to advise greater proof reading care since throughout the story you call the hero Nick (who became Peter) yet at the end his original name is given as Alex! We also know that Elizabeth is Diane but who the hell is Barbara? Looking forward to the next one, Pete.

Risq_001Risq_001almost 17 years ago
Oh my god, what the heck is wrong with you?!?

<p>First I could care less if your personally into Incest or not. I could care who in the world is into it. But when you <b>sneak</b> in a story clearly about incest into any section other than what it really is, and then try to <i>PRETEND</i> that some folks might remotely find it to be incest, but if so then it could only be loosely defined as such, you are just purely misleading people for your own amusement. This was very strongly an Incest themed story</p>

<p>I say that because I've heard people say "If you sleep with your sister in-law/brother in-law its incest. I've heard if you sleep with a 3rd or 4th cousin, or anyone that could possibly share any of your families blood, it is. Even though, various state laws and other people might not agree with either of those senerios. That's why various states differ between what is incest and what is not. But in this story it was <b><i>CLEARELY,</i> INCEST</b> regardless of who you might ask.</p>

<p>When I read your header I thought it might be a story about a distant cousin or relative, or even an in-law, who hooked up with the main character in this story where depending on where you lived they it might be incest, but his daughter?!? And you say some <i>might</i> consider it to be incest?!?! Who do you know who wouldn't consider it incest regardless of country or origin?!?!</p>

<p>What. Is. Wrong. With. You? You can't be this dense. You can't possibly write what you put as a header, put it in the romance section, and then write what you did as the story and then say it is <i>possibly</i> incest. There is no <i>possibly</i> to it, it was <b>CLEARLY</b> incest, no if ands or buts about it.</p>

<p>It very clearly either needed to go under Incest or you need a different warning at the top. Trying to say:</p>

<p><i>It <b>may</b> contain incest depending on how <b>you define</b> incest. The story wrestles with the question, 'Is it incest if you don't know you are related until after the sex?'</i></p>

<p>Let see, I define it by the defination used by "Websters" dictionary: </p>

<p><b>noun</b></p>

<p>sexual intercourse between persons too closely related to marry (as between a parent and a child)</p>

<p>I don't know what world you live in, but when someone has sex with their very <b>OWN</b> child, who they helped create and bring into this world, I challenge you to a single <b>non-Deviant</b> lifestyle person who won't look at you with disgust as you tell them you think sleeping with your child <i>might</i> not be incest.</p>

<p>Not for the first time I wished I could give negative numbers for a story. If you like incest stories go for it, that's your choice and I could careless what you choose to do in your life, but don't try and disguise a story as something different so you can "broaden" my mind. That is something that will never be acceptible to me and I'm really pissed you tried to pretend it was anything other than what this really was.</p>

<p>EWWWWWWWWW</P>

-Risq

gatorhermitgatorhermitalmost 17 years ago
I Liked this Story and Disagree with the Comments

Putting this story into the incest category would have telegraphed the ending, although I will confess that I suspected that was what was happening early in the story. Yes, there were a couple of typos, but this is a good story - sad that Nick and his wife missed the rest of their lives together plus the 14 years - but still a good story. I liked how the mistaken identity rolled out a piece at a time. <p>I don't usually like incest stories, but this one is quite well written. I think Risq's (who I usually agree with) comments are too long and too harsh (an over-reaction).

Alvaron53Alvaron53almost 17 years ago
Nicely told

Well written with an interesting plot and backstory. Thank you, Scorpio44, for a unique story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Homeboy

Not only was your story very good and your writing excellent, But it hit home as I grew up near Evergreen and Soto and El Typeyac is still one of my favorite places to eat. As a topper, I also graduated from Cal. State L.A.

I have enjoyed all of your stories so far, as they seem to be in my age range and sort of overlap with some of my own experiences. Great work, keep them coming.

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Another good story

Not as good as "Scammed", but a very good story. I saw only one mistake in it.

srgeek

EspressoBolusEspressoBolusover 15 years ago
what did you mean by "how you define.....?

Incest is pretty clear in this case, and not at all iffy. Pete may not have known, but Diane/Elizabeth certainly did.

taxpapabobtaxpapabobalmost 15 years ago
Love Is Great, Even When Taboo

The SEX IS HOT, and the development into the permanent love story is nicely depicted and evolved, if improbable because it's based on Elizabeth's multifarious deceits from moment one on. How can he avoid feeling nagging distrust of her on occasion? I am happy that they build a lasting, loving marriage and adore their children. And I hope they never lose the knack of driving each other into screaming multiple orgasms. But there will always be ifs -- sweet love works that way. Thank you for a FINE story.

OleTroubadorOleTroubadoralmost 15 years ago
Just super!

YOU are my favorite author.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
This had the makings of a brilliant story

then you fucked it up by introducing incest in to it and the girl turning out to be his daughter. I enjoy incest stories but this one was ruined by it - it took away the mystique and thrill of him being mistaken for a spy - that side could have been developed as well as his idea for the PIF Foundation and made it really interesting - the incest killed it from being a damn good tale to just another dad fucks daughter and they ride off in to the sunset and live happily ever after mediocre plot.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Interesting story:

In really enjoyed this one. The twist about his driver being his daughter was predictable but I appreciated the warning in your preface that gave it away. I REALLY liked that you left open just who's intelligence agency arranged for the change in identity.

tazz317tazz317about 12 years ago
PAY OR PLAY IT

as long as its fast. TK U MLJ LV NV

Bret_HarteBret_Hartealmost 11 years ago
We Need Another Chapter

Although the Ex had some bad words and hurt feelings upon his arrest, and transfer to China, statements by Diane/Elizabeth/Barbara(?), and statements attributed to the Ex by the same source clearly indicate how much she missed him, and how much she loved him. Remarriage after a divorce, especially in the belief that her MAIN MAN would be in a Chinese Prison for 30 years, with little likelihood of surviving, should not disqualify her from being given another chance, just because she thinks that he could not possibly forgive her for her actions, especially, when he clearly has.

The relationship with his daughter might put a crimp in re-uniting with the wife, but a writer of your skill should have no problem in constructing a plausible scenario, perhaps something along the line of your story "Either is Not the Only Choice."

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
VICE IS NICE BUT INCEST IS BEST

THAT WAS AN INTERESTING STORY from a different angle.....liked the way the girl took over looking after him and the idea of the PIF FOUNDATION....her flat mates were a hoot when they came in just because she had screamed when having an orgasm.....but then they were conveniently killed of but what happened to the flat mates who he agreed to finance...did that all fall through as they were supposed to be dead....never explained that bit...also it would seem his ex is still fond of him....perhaps they should meet but then she will think he and her daughter are both dead...strange conflict going on here...but at least they get to live together and raise kids but who the hell is Barbara??????...where did she pop up from.....

gulshannraygulshannrayover 10 years ago
A CASE OF MISTAKEN IDENTITY

The story is good and good narration but I was wondering if the author slipped in mentioning Barbara (in lieu of Elizabeth ?).in the last but one para of the page 3(last page).

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Incest pure and simple, there is no question about that, so how this author can say it depends on how you view incest is beyond me. Put your incest shit where it belongs.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Stupid storyline!

If each student makes $60,000 per year for 5 years that is 2x60,000x5= 600,000. 10% of $600,000 is 60,000. He only gave them $1000 per month for two years which is $24,000. He also gave Cathy $1000 per month so she would get $24,000. Your math is way off.

From the very beginning I felt that Cathy was his daughter. Intelligent daughters don't fuck their fathers. Only dumb daughters do that! Why would the USA handover their spy to China. They don't do that to their CIA operatives. They protect them. If the USA purposely handed him over to the Chinese knowing that he wasn't their spy, then he could sue the USA government for infringing on his civil rights. He would get a lot of money from the USA and all of the government people who were involved with this conspiracy would be fired or impeached and give jail terms. The entire plot doesn't workout like the author thinks it should. As for setting up their fake deaths, why would the USA government do that. Also their family could request DNA sampling prior to their burial.

penneydog55penneydog55almost 6 years ago
Say

What ! Did I miss something? His own Daughter stalked Him-Then Fucked Him -They then P.O.Q. to Florida,-With new identity They now have Kids?..... Fuck-Me --This is Bullshit Man! ?..Fine Grade smelly Shit! ★ Is all This Story is Worth! WOOF!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Yep

That’s the answer. The question was something like, is incest wrong if you don’t know you’re related to your sex partner at the time. That qualifier really makes no difference. Incest is illegal in all 50 of the United States and in just about every civilized country in the world. And just because you don’t know it at the time doesn’t mean you’re not breaking the law. So it’s not necessary about right or wrong, it’s more about going to jail if you get caught at it. And then, registering for life as a sex offender, being outed and publicly humiliated, all that fun stuff. And, intentional or not, this story still belongs in the “Incest” section.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
WHO'S BARBARA?...

And yeah, he's fucking his own daughter. That is incest whether he knew or not. That's compounded by the fact that she did know.

ScorpioJJScorpioJJover 3 years ago

Could have been a nice sweet story of a family reunited. The incest took it in the wrong direction.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Should be in the incest category not romance, liked it until they fucked because it was obvious she was his daughter.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

It caught me "flat footed" !

Great Story !

THANKS !

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

A great story ruined by the introduction. The punch line would have been a great climax to a well written story. Really sad.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Who is Barbara??? I thought her name was Elibeth?

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