All Comments on 'A Chance Meeting'

Fucking big of you!

Badly written - you need to work with an editor.

Get an editor. There are so many mistakes.

For my first written "anything" in about 12 years, I don't think it was that bad. I thought this was more for entertainment... instead of being critical some actual direct and precise feedback would be more helpful so that I can put it into a revision. And besides... until recently, I didn't know I could have a "editor" look at it. Thanks.