All Comments on 'A Chat with Valerie'

I can understand what you're saying about the 'net' jargon and the text-speak used in defining the story. I wanted to show that something like a chat could be erotic but also that it is with a real person interacting. I didn't want it to sound like some cheesy raunchy story written from a personal perspective. I just wanted it to be honest including everything we (my chatter & I) encountered and felt with little censoring or obstruction. I wasn't trying to brag - just hopeful that anyone who may think chat isn't erotic would see otherwise. Thank you for your comment! Blessings!

I realize that this submission is a "transcript" of Yahoo cyber sex, but I found the net jargin in the beginning distracting. (The such-n-such user has a different version of Yahoo! Messenger, etc. It was like you copy/pasted everything out of the IM window and hit SUBMIT.)