by geronimo_appleby
Was a great story.... didn't need the lottery ticket bit at the end....
I felt set up. From the beginning I felt lead to think of John and Jenny as the main characters--the sympathetic characters. After all, they both had similar attitudes toward the season. Then Avril comes in and "steals" John. I was left disappointed. At least Jenny ended up with all the cash!
Well it was Christmas :-) Lucky young man to have so many christmases rolled into one for his first effort. Deffo a five - but that's quite normal for this author cos I like his style. Thank you.
Very expressively written, with characters I could relate to and some wonderful naughty bits... Wanted it to go on and on!
Real story, real folk, real lives, real sex.
The lotttery win at the end tasted a bit schmalzy, but I'll let you off for xmas. Five, and my best wishes.
Just loved it. Realistically written and I got to like the characters.
Thanks for sharing.
Loved the lottery win at the end. Would love to see more of this trio. Maybe Avril could teach John to become a Dom? hmmm. Time for bed ~ wInks~
I kind of feel sorry for Jenny, I thought John would end up with her. Oh well, all's well that ends well right? Loved this :)
Now this story I really liked. I could sympathize with John. I was 19 before I lost my virginity in a whore house in Tijawana (don't know how to spell it) and really shy about the whole thing. Some of the comments seemed to think the lottery win was poor or smaltzy or something. Up until the lottery win I was feeling real bad for Jenny. She hadn't seemed to get as much as she deserved. The lottery sort of leveled it out.
These things just dont happen, but having said that, its the most enjoyable literotica story i've read in a long time. I felt for all the characters, definately 5 out of 5.
I am in a lot of ways similar to John. I really enjoyed the story and was hoping for John and Jenny to fall in love, but at least they both won in the end. You should write a second chapter to this telling how their lives changed for better or worse.
This is my second trip through this story, and I've enjoyed it even more than the first time.
With what he's learned from Avril and Jenny, he can give his Mum a real Happy Christmas surprise now -- if he's got the energy for it! ;-)
Thanks for another sweet, loving story!
Yes, such a wonderful Xmas Eve story. Five Stars. This absolutely needs another chapter or more. Hope you do it one day.
Personally would have preferred John and Jenny because Avril is so much older....well virgin boy got a sugar mummy cougar.....great that Jenny wins the lottery
I thoughly enjoyed this story, a couple of working girls fall for a virgin john have great sex, partying and then hitting the lottery, you can't write a better story. It's funny, romantic, a little dire, and also full of hope. Great job, thanks for writing, it's much appreciated 💗👍