All Comments on 'A Christmas Wish...'

I enjoyed that. The second person rarely works for me, but this one was very good. I also tend to go for more exposition and plot, but that carries a fair amount of baggage, whereas a story like this doesn't need to get out of it's own way before it gets hot. I only noticed one grammar/style element that took me out of the story - a use of "in my pussy" (I think that's what it was) to end two consecutive sentences, but that's very minor.

Keep up the good work!

Mmmm thank you Santa ,