All Comments on 'A Daughter's Love'

Totally believable and the dialogue is perfect. I was hard the whole read and let go about the same time he did.

I understand that American English is not "the Queen's" English, and reading fiction written by someone elsewhere in the Empire is sometimes difficult; the differences (e.g., "favour" vs. "favor," or the use of colloquialisms) usually jump out and interrupt the flow of the story. I did not have that problem with this story.

The storytelling was actually very good, better than most. There was a good mix of introspection and dialogue, reminiscence and present tense. The dialogue was realistic. I felt the feelings I think you wre trying to convey.

However, there were some errors that were simply the result of carelessness and lack of proofreading. For example, you mentioned her reaching down towards his "naval" when it should be "navel." I gave your story five stars despite these errors, but I would encourage you to seek an editor. These errors are distracting to the more intelligent readers and impede the flow of your message.

Good luck and keep writing!

I'm sorry, but it irritates me when authors on here use an apostrophe in place of quotation marks for dialog. That's just pure laziness, in my opinion. Otherwise, not a bad story.

Opinions are fine -- until they clash with facts.

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The author is British. Using single quotes instead of double quotes is rather common in the UK. What is true "pure laziness" is not bothering to learn the facts. Your opinion is shit.

I loved the story, smart and loving.

Your name at the end of the story was a horrible pun to go with this story. Corpse_rider, really, right after he asks himself who he had made love to. Took away all good feeling the story gave.

I enjoyed it enough to give it a well deserved Five Stars!

Just loved the story. Thanks.

That was a great story. I love those type of stories.. I hope the next one brings the the other children into the circle of love making.

Well written and with a different slant on a father/daughter relationship.

The story line is a bit sad but very well handled and in the end rewarding.

so that love lives longer.

I have read many stories here. but, this one is by far, the best. my own life pararells this one. please,please do not let this story be the end. it has every thing to rip apersons heart out. god bless you for your insight.

S'nice 5*

Nice story

Touching and warm story. 5 stars

Way too cloying . . . .