All Comments on 'A Day at the Beach'

A wonderful maiden effort. Keep at it.

You have written great characters, location description, and some great exhibitionism, along with great sex. This story doesn't deserve to end here. So start writng right now! LOL

Great story, made me feel like I was there watching what was going on :)

Thanks for the positive feedback guys - and I am not sure what will happen with Martin and Kim, but I do have other stories in me that will be coming soon.

Nice story and fantastic for a first. Where do they go next? More exhibitionist or will they get into a 3some or more?

Cant wait to hear!

What a great first story! I agree with the other comments this story shouldn't end here. Kim is discovering and revealing her wantion wild side. She is a willing explorer about to embark upon a journey of sexual wonder. Martin has already invisioned Kim with other guys, and they are heading home to help Tim and Chris with their party. It just seems like the natural progression of things. Maybe there is just a party of four and Kim can help herself to the "heaps of meat" that will be so willingly provided. How ever it goes .... keep up the GREAT work.

Delightful story with a young feminine voice. The pace and mixture of thoughts and dialogue were well done. Thank you. Keep writing.

You've captured both the ambience of Bondi beach of years past (hard to believe you weren't there in the 90s) and the feelings I have when on a beach in a g-string.

Maybe a series of "A Day at the (shopping centre, library, art galllery, cricket etc)".

This was really hot. I'm leaving you a bit of feedback over at the forums, but suffice it to say here: you've clearly got what it takes to do well in this genre. I would love to see you write more. I don't even normally look through this category. I found your story mainly because of your feedback request on the forum, and I'm very glad I did.

You've got good instincts. Go with 'em!

And thank you for sharing this!

Thanks again everyone for the fantastic feedback. I have figured out another adventure for Kim and Martin, but I have another story with different characters coming first.

I went back and read it again to leave you a comment, and i have to say it got me going even more than the first time. The thrill of kim showing herself off mixed with the Martin's extra lust that comes with knowing that everyone can see how beautiful she is, but he is the only one who can have her...makes for a pretty sexy little story ;)

delightfully told. I enjoyed the different voices and the way you built and held the tension. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

This is a great story! I love the way you balanced Kim's excitement and trepidation.

Not to be rude but hurry the hell up and add some more stories!

that is a truly erotic story...i was aroused from start to cumming!

I can even forgive the "taught" curves. Kim can walk past my beach blanket any time.

Fantastic story!! Kept leading us further down the road to a fabulous climax! You definitely had me right there with your characters. I wanted everyone on the beach to see how hugely hard I was!!

Hard. I love going topless whenever I can get away with it and particularly love giving men a flash and then watching them roll over or adjust their togs. Brilliant story xx

...she was wearing wickedweasels, yes?

Sigh, just loved this story - and am looking forward to more!

:-)

Good story, More about loving Wives & Gfs

Please write more. My wife and I have walked naked on the beach and had sex in the water and on the beach, but never with anyone else present.

Hopefully you will write again, you are very good at it. You slowly built things up and it was enjoyable to read. Thanks....kntoz2u@yahoo.com

Just waiting for the next episode - me and my lady had a similar incident in Gran Canaries.

Very sexy story. You have a very sensual way of writing, looking forward to more.

Only one story and it has been nearly 5 years now. I liked this one and wish you had done more. It was sensual and sweet. I liked the gentleness of the story. If you are writing under another name, please let us know.

Great job on this story. Love all the details about what the characters were feeling and how you took your time letting the story unfold. Really hot - loved it! PLEASE write some more!

sensual about exhibitionism and may be starting Swinging or cuckolding