All Comments on 'A Family United Pt. 01'
by DestinysChild
- 21 Comments
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoThe buildup was quite lengthy but overall a great story. The huge dick was not necessary to the story. But who knows if someone actually could match your description.
Pikerwulfalmost 11 years agoAgreed it was lengthy but well worth the read! Please do continue. One can imagine all sorts of different things that could happen....
leann5redalmost 11 years agogood from start to finsh looking to more yours leann xxx
Maximguyalmost 11 years agoThe huge dick part was a bit of a turn off, but the characters and story are rally good. Please don't leave us waiting too long on the next part.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoIt was interresting but a bit to long for one chapter. Agree to that all the emphasis on how huge the dick was became a bit redundant an eventually took away from the story. JMfemaleO Will look for the next one.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoGood dirty storyline, turned on in many spots, Charleen was wicked hot, Charleys big cock was overplayed, not hot. Overall well written.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoWhy does a writer think that a huge cock is needed all the time? Isn't the sex suppose to be enjoyable? This could be an excellent. series but the constant reminder of Charlie's oversize cock is a turnoff.
Anonymousover 10 years agobig dicks and big tits are a total turn off keep the sizes normal not alien. negative vote for oversized equipment.
Anonymousover 10 years agolong drawn out and a bit boring. i have to agree with all the others, the oversized dick was the last nail in the coffin for this so called story.
Anonymousabout 10 years agoFirst and foremost you are a solid writer. You have a real ability to paint an innocent aggression with your young female characters. It hits an effective note that many here aspire to. Please continue!
Reading other comments, the large dick/breast negative feedback can be written up to that fetish not being their particular bent. And that's fine, this particular story isn't for them. But it certainly is for those of us that do have that inclination so please provide us with more quality material!
sabra16023over 9 years agoThis story screams to be continued. Waiting for the next chapter. Thanks
Anonymousover 7 years agoAs porn, it managed to be physically accurate and erotic at the same time. Quite the accomplishment. Hot and heavy sex, too.
Rancher46almost 2 years agoGreat story but it really needs to continue but seeing that it has been almost a decade since this was published, sadly I think this the end for this wonderful story of Charlene and Charley. 5/5
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