by ChrisGeyser
I have loved reading 3 of your stories so far. Would love to read more. Your writing is excellent. No grammatical mistakes.
This was a good story, but it didn't flow like one. More like you were reading a how to book. It would have been better if you were writing it like there were two people there. You made it like you were reading it to your mom.
This story is full of bad grammar yet in it you make reference to online writing which is not worth reading because of bad grammar ! Enough said.
The guy was a dweeb. The mom was OK. Way way too much time on the buildup to the sex. Then way way too little time on the sex itself. I gave it a 1. I feel I wasted my time reading this.
Warren
He is ok when online, but when confronted with a live, willing, and sexy woman he fumbles around like a twelve year old. The billing was that he was going to seduce her. It turns out she has to initiate the action and he runs away to his room to go back online. It is probably better that way, for her.
Son wants to seduce Mom but when she starts giving him all kinds of 'go' signals but he's too dumb or too shy to act on them. It's a good thing she takes charge or he'd still be wasting his time with cybersex!
It's very hot. Although I'm not so fond of 1st person narration in present tense; it's confusing at time imhop. But, the plot and action is sooo good. Wish you'd decide to write more stories.
I thoroughly enjoyed it, but would have appreciated a clearer description of both Chris and mum.
catmoore43@yahoo.co.uk
that was an amazing story. have been cumming over it for the last few days now. why cant we have more of these stories. I lack the patience to write but I wish I could pen down my thoughts in such a magical manner
Really enjoyed it, but i don't think it needs a chapter 2. I'd rather see a fresh new idea started all over again. It's the build up that's fun. Maybe the mother can be the driving force next time? Can't wait for your next submission.
Pretty good read, good build-up. Definitely needs second chapter.
...in fact, I would love to read more of this mother becoming more and more a slut for her son!
You put a lot of thought into detail, building up the changes in inhibition in the mother. And it wasn't necessarily too long, it was painful, but it was worth the wait
Exceptional imagination displayed by the author.