All Comments on 'A Line of Work Ch. 03'

Your technique is quite good; the storytelling moves along smoothly and is interesting. But you have one bad habit, like picking your nose at the dinner table LOL!

Watch your handling of dialogue and dialogue tags. <"It's a nice day." Said the man.> Sorry, but when you ended a sentence with a period and started a new sentence with a capital letter, I believed you. At least I believed you the first few times until I realized that you were probably fooling me. Then it just got plain annoying.

"It's a nice day." Said the man.

is much different from

"It's a nice day," said the man.

Don't fuck with your readers. Let them know when you're starting a new thought and when you're just identifying who said what. :-)

Loved every second of it

Great story can't wait for the next chapter