All Comments on 'A Long Walk Home Ch. 12'

omg i was getting ready to sleep and just happened to check and see if you had updated!!! the best surprise i have gotten in a long time! what an chapter too. the pain of rayne, gard, annie, rafe, and caleb was so heart wrenching, it was a fight to keep from bawling!

i love love love love love you and have been reading all your stories as you've published them. thanks for all that you do, and your willingness to post on this site!

KC

I have bawled quite a few times to your stories. This was just another time. FANTASTIC writing. I check literally a few times a day lol. <3 the way you think and keep us hanging on the edge of our seats! Wonderful wonderful mind you've got there ;)

Can we please go back to Dayton & Freya now? :)

great chapter but my emotions need some happy events to recover please

oyu sure are the master at this. can not wait for your next chapter

I do wish Raine has fessed up on what she thinks she is apart from that this was a brilliant chapter.

the best chapter so far i think, completely exilerating. I hope we get to see jared's reaction - ive missed the hanlon pack so it would be nice to 'visit'.

Poor rayne though, i hope she's ok. At least with so many loose ends out there we know we've still another chapter or two to go!!! Nice work jaz, thanks as always xx

It was sad moment the triumvirate was 1st time observed. The true power of those 3 would be incredible to see. It was soul shattering for rihanna, caleb & gard to disclose all of it and mostly for annie it was terrible when rafe rejects her. I cried while reading.

...ok early Tuesday morning I confess, I actually broke out it a huge green and jumped a little in my seat to see this chapter posted. I quickly got up got a drink and settled in so that I wouldn't be bothered while reading it!! I LOVED IT. I don't know what is wrong with me though, I feel like a selfish, greedy woman when I think, 3 pages but the third page is so short that I am so upset when it comes up..LOL

Not GREEN..LOL

I see it fitting that a thunder storm crept up while reading this. The power being off even more so. (no worries iPad to the rescue)

This one was dark Jaz, and very emotional at the end. I'll admit to misty eyes.

I'll have to mail you later as 3am has the brain a bit out of order.

Needless to say, it was great!

as always thank you for another breathtaking chapter, Rayne frustrates me though. She talks to Dayton about opening up to Freya but then goes and pull this crap with Gard......talk about that girl got issues!!!

Love It!!,Love It!!,..........O.M.G i love this chapter. cried when i read page 2 and a little sade that page 3 was so short but i love the way you write and how you keep you reader's(me) on the edge.

ps you are my number 1 writer on literotica.

You get better every chapter, your awesome and brilliant and all those other nice words that have been used countless times to describe you and your work. Can't say much more, except hurry up and get published so I can have these stories in print. I promise that I'll even buy multiple copies (like you could stop me) if you do :)

acceptable, ace, admirable, agreeable, bad, boss*, bully, capital, choice, commendable, congenial, crack, deluxe, excellent, exceptional, favorable, first-class, first-rate, gnarly, gratifying, great, honorable, marvelous, neat, nice, pleasing, positive, precious, prime, rad, recherch, reputable, satisfactory, satisfying, select, shipshape, sound, spanking, splendid, sterling, stupendous, super, super-eminent, super-excellent, superb, superior, tip-top, up to snuff, valuable, welcome, wonderful, worthy

& these are just to describe the first scene. Damn girl - a lot of emotion, a lot of love and way too much heartache going on - LOVE IT!!!!

Don't forget why Gard showed up in the first place.

A key chapter indeed! So many things going on at the same time. but as the kittygoddess below said, let's not forget why Gard turned up in the first place!

Jaz, I hope you didn't weaken my favourite character! Why do you have her all running away and unsure of herself for? Then getting mad at her man -alright vampire, for no real reason. Don't you think an ancient 6000 year old vampire can be better utilised than chasing a confused kitty through the jungle? Then again, it might be fun! LOL

Lovely interaction and great dialogue though, with all Annie and Caleb and Rafe. All the favourites are back, and I'm in a delightful state of anticipation, awaiting the next instalment!

A wonderful chapter but i am curious where Rayne took off too and in all that happened Gard did as well and i don't know if i can wait for the next update...lol But i know i know i have too and i think its a good thing i keep my nails short or i would be biting them while i'm waiting for the next update.

Donna

that the next chapter is up! :) I also felt good after reading this chapter because I had a hunch that Gard had something to do with the were/vampire child in the past. turns out my hunch was correct! (although i thought Gard brainwashed Rayne or something after feeling a mating pull with her... then again i really dunno the rules in your stories' world :D)

I'm looking forward to the next chapter! (PS: I'm starting to miss Freya and Dayton :D)

I'm going to need therapy now! Soooo I was partially correct in how A died........ now who saved R.... and oh yeah won't C be perplexed when he finds out that G's new mate is the kitty in question???? There is no mistake you are the queen of the emotional roller coaster.... please don't make me beg for more... I mean you know I will but I think I'm having a heart attack.............................

THANK YOU JAZ!!

YOU HAVE MADE MY DAY!!!

I WANT TO FIND OUT WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN WITH FREYA/DAYTON, GARD/RAYNE BUT AT THE SAME TIME I DONT BECAUSE IT WILL BE THE END OF THE STORY AND I DONT WANT IT TO END !!!

How exciting to see the next chapter updated! You do seem to keep topping yourself every time, or is just that the most recent one becomes the 'best' to us? I love the way you create incidents in one part of the story that then sync in with, and move on, the other storylines. The emotions in this one were quite traumatic for all involved, but it's all going to work out in the end isn't it?? In Jaz we trust ;) LOL

Gard is now in the picture, so surely now it's only a matter of time before he realises who Rayne is?

oh and ahem - there is the small matter of Freya and Dayton to go back to. Next sync - Rayne finds them in her panicked escape from Gard, perhaps?

Just loved it, Jaz (but no surprise there!)

lol

F

I knew Rayne was the first vamp/were child!! awesome! I really hope she doesn't run away, she just needs to come clean to gard :)...

as always, you rock!

I just started reading this story and I have stayed up all nigth reading it. I was sooo excited to see the new chapter now I cannot wait for the next installment!!! Know we have to see what happens with Rayne and Gard, cannot wait for the next one..... HURRY UP!!!! PLEASEE

I cried..What a wonderful story. I will be waiting for the next chapter.I can't wait to see what happens next..

I just, Wow, I just have no words at all that was definatly something that had to come out and for it to come out that way and I'm sure that is only the tip of the iceberg! My tissue box is offically empty now and I need more for what more there is to come from you Jaz :)

Poor Rayne, now that she's pack I hope Rafe can call her back home. And speaking of Rafe, that whole scene w/Annie was heart breaking. And then to have Gard calm Rafe down, how will that effect the relationship between the two once Rayne is mentioned? As always I await your next installment.

Lucky I checked your page on a hunch. And this chapter was like a warm chocolate cookie after a great meal. Very, very satisying. My girl Rayne had some interesting developments in this one, didn't she? I love her powers, by the way. And the vampire/were combination has some interesting possibilities. Kind of like my favorite vampire movie Underworld.

I can't wait to see where this story goes! Keep them coming!

The twists and turns in this story are just remarkable and that,my dear,is what sets you apart from all!!!!

kudos to you

Btw, i heard a rumour that you are a famous writer just moonlighting on this site!!Is that true?!Confess now!!!

Ahhhhhhhhh......what a fitting way to introduce Gard to the pack! Let me tell u ...JC, it was marvellous, absolutely breathtakingly beautiful. This is me doing a jig when I saw 3 pages.......only to find out page 3 could have been page 2.5....lol. I can't wait for the other chapters, please don't make us wait a whole week though.....saturday or sunday or even friday would be a good day to make ur legion of fans happy with the weekend. Oh well, wish ful thinking!!!!!!!! Keep em comin'

That was one helluva rollercoaster ride! Fireworks galore! I didn't know whether to bitchslap both Rayne and Gard for their stubborness, cry because of all the hurt and insecurity they were feeling or just stomp my foot in frustration..lol.

THEN.....the confrontation between Rafe, Gard, Caleb, and Annie...sheeee-iiiittt!!!!! Talk about the feathers flying and the shit hitting the fan! I need a damned drink, and I DON'T mean iced tea!! All this jealousy and testosterone is getting thick and I'm thinking of dragging out my hipboots to wade thru it...hehehe!

What you have done with this chapter is beyond words and description and to add my voice to all the others...I am sniveling and begging and batting blue puppy dog eyes for more...lol. (did it work?)

Tereasa (T)

P.S. I need more tissues.....

Seriously,,, You just had to stop it right there???

Keep up the GREAT work. As always loving every word!!!

The cliffhangers are killing me. I know I've said this before but your vampire/wolf saga is by far the best on Lit. Thank you for allowing us to view your work.

Lol, I'd have to say "What Teresa said" this time.. oh and I hate crying!! *smack* I totally can't wait till next wednesday :( Does it really have to be a weekly thing?

U are the greatest and with that please some more. I'm glad annie secret is out and gard needs to control his anger. He is the one that drove her to run not rafe. Poor rafe I'm glad they came back together. Now just to get gard/ranye and dayton/freya together yeah happy world. Your stories just keep gettig better and better. U are the master storyteller.

Wow, what a fantastic chapter. You're characters are so realistic and diverse. They cover an entire spectrum of human emotions. Your ability to help the reader connect with your characters is simply outstanding. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

You never disappoint...ever... Your story is by far the best I've ever read on lit so far (this one of course, but also all the all were/vampire stories you've written)! I'm sooo excited for the next installment! And it can't be soon enough!!

First of all I AM NOT A PRETTY CRYER!!! I probbaly spelled cryer wrong but I dont care!!!! Now my eyes are puffy and red and I still have to go to the gym for my Zumba class!!! Secondly that dang on Rayne is just pissing me off!!! I just want to shake the crap out of her!!! She is way to old for the nonsense she's doing!!! Now Dayton and freya just need to get their act together and that will be one less attack of indigestion for me!!! Now hurry with the next chapter!!!! Your HHIC

BRAVO BRAVO !!!

God your stories are amazing! You have such a great imagination! I check everyday to see if another chapter has posted I'm that addicted.

I love this story so much!

I totally understand that your very busy but I feel like shaking you.lol

I wish the story was done.

I love your imagination:D

Damn another great chapter. I can't find the words to describe it. They just seem to pale in comparison to the words you have written. Keep up the great work and I can't wait for the next chapter

Jim

I feel like a crack addict and you're my dealer stringing me along. I cannot wait until the next chapter!

Holy wow! You have so many relationships intermingled and so many conflicts that are happening all at once but it never becomes confusing. You are an incredible storyteller. The explanations and emotions run so smoothly together. Nothing about your writing is choppy and this is such an incredible achievement. I sincerely hope that you find a publisher because your talents needs to be shared. Literotica can only bring in so many viewers.

I'll stop with the compliments here or I'll be waxing poetic in no time. Can't wait for the next update!

as much as i am enjoying reading this, i have to say that i hope there will be less time dedicated to rihanna and caleb. I'm more interested in freya and rayne and even gard and the children. I was able to understand how all if them are coneected because i read 'fighting the inevitable', but i think for others, bringing in these new character all of a sudden might be confusing.

I am in total agreement with wedge413, curse you Jazcullen and were is the next chapter!!!!!!

FIFTH time I have read this. I'm with the other commenters on this one.

"Hi, My name is Trisha, and I'm JazCullen story addict" (applause)

another work of the master, gard needs to chill, rayne needs to get a grip and i hope freya and dayton can sooth everybody and get down to having wamps ( ok i invented that, were/vamp kids)

I am having such a hard time waiting now that I am completely caught up. I started reading your stories a couple weeks ago and now im completely caught up and I am like a addict without my fix. More please!! Soon!! Love your writing Jaz!!

I am so glad that Gard is out of hiding. Maybe now there can be some things clearedup. like who is Ray? How is Gard going to fit into the pack....LOL

Following in the foot steps of other posters,

"Hi, My name is Kia, and I'm a JazCullen story addict."

Okay, seriously though, we definitely need some type of support group because your stories are beyond words. The emotions you are able to evoke - wow. This particular chapter was a long time coming; Thank you!

Now about Dayton and Freya...where were we?!.

Kia

"Hi, my name is Mel and I'm a JazCullen story addict."

I've been waiting for what feels like FOREVER for this chapter to come out. I think I'm going to cry if it takes too long for the next one.

What's happening with Dayton and Freya? Can't wait to hear the rest of their story!

As I love every chapter to every story you have written. Your imagination is awe inspiring! I wish we had a way to vote on the best comments to a story,you have the most vocal fans on this site!!

I think Rafe and Gard will eventually become close or at least I hope so

And Caleb caught the middle! This should be interesting! Oh, and Gard doesn't know it yet, but he's in line for a world of hurt if he continues to piss off Rayne--you DO NOT piss off a cat and get away with it!

Great chapter!

Well written, the story moves along, I look forward to next wens.

Following the other postings

Hi, My names Kay and I too Love JazCullen's stories.

I love what you did in this chapter and cannot wait for the next instalment.

WELL DONE JAZ

Hot damn Jaz baby!!! I'm new here! I didn't know there was a site just for us animal 'lovers' hehehe nudge and a wink say no more: I can't wait to read ALLLLLLlllllla your stuff!!!!!!!!¡¡¡¡¡¡!!!!!!!!!!!

what can I say it was just wonderful I even had to grab a few tissues looking forward to the next one

*walks to the podium* Hiya i'm Donna *clears throat* i am also a Jaz Story Addict..

*chuckles* i couldn't resist and i keep checking back for that next update and i'm starting to get twitchy without it...lol

Donna..lol

addiction this is an addiction i love this story and i need you to update soon please!!!!! i love this world with all my heart and really believe you should get published

I am sitting on the edge of my seat....just waiting on your next chapter, Jaz!!! I am turning into such a MAJOR addict, just like everyone else who reads your stories!!!!!!! Hehehe...gotta love it!!!!!

I just figured out the name of our "support group"..."The Jaz Junkies"...hehehe...well, thats what we all are...even the one lonely little member that disses on Jaz all the time, whether or not he/she wants to admit it...lmao!

Tereasa (T)

I agree with the commentor that posted 4/14/11.

I knew I'd read some of your stories and that the many of the characters were familiar, but this last chapter tied them together. Now I get to reread all the others to keep the characters straight - isn't senility wonderful!

i really love your style of writing, you truly are a gifted writer, but the only real complaint i have is that when rafe comes back to annie and is kissing her cheeks and apologizing, it seems to be a little too much affection for a brother and a sister. when i read it i could have easily exchanged the reconciliation between brother and sister for a climactic reconciliation between two lovers, it left me with a gross feeling rather than a happy one.

... but you really need to stop confusing irresolute and resolute. Irresolute means uncertain or unsure, resolute is the opposite of that. Please stop conflating them!

I like this series,but you seriously need to put a stop to all these powers ,

invisibility ,boiling water with a touch ,manifesting clothes ,what's next ? flying?

Seriously ,enough !

No more running away. Everyone on this story constantly runs away. Its just ridiculous.

Your Mate is dead and someone kisses you ? Run away !

Your Sister is a Vampire Queen ? Run away !

Your coffee cold ? Run away !

No more Bagels ? Run away !

Where does it stop. All those guys are supposedly tough as nails. News-flash: Tough men don't run away ! (Also they don't have long hair, but thats another topic)

But I personally have no complaints. =P I love your style in writing and I love how it's so easy to get wrapped up in the emotions that the characters feel. That's one of the things I find most attractive when I'm reading a story: you feel what the characters feel, you can almost smell what they smell, and it sure as hell sucks when the series ends! Keep up the amazing work. You're very, very talented at capturing readers. =)

forget what the rest say i liked the story and the abilities the stories a bit long but worth it again I LIKE

But honestly, I like the comments even more. I'm rolling on the floor laughing at some of the stuff people point out - if this ever gets published as a book, you need to add an Ancient called the "Commentator" who just hangs back and points out all the same things your fans have.

If you don't like Jaz's style, her story, her imagination, creativity, bra size, number of pets . . .just leave those of us who are so enamored with her in peace. What is with this compulsive need you have to find fault. Cripes if it is that important write a better story yourself. There is absolutely NOTHING wrong with what Jaz is doing. She is not writing this story to be the story you would write (if you could write) she is writing the story she wants to write. I for one like it greatly just the way it is.

Even if I did not I would not be enough of an ass to find fault with her publicly. Have you no couths at all. She is sharing copius amounts of her time, energy, creativity, and love with you at no cost whatsoever. Where else can you get that? Back off and shut up! Lynn

Is why, Count2Three, you continue to read Jaz's stories, when it's so obvious you don't like them. Honestly, if all you're going to do is complain (in damn near every story, too), then why don't you stop reading? That way the rest of us can enjoy without your stupid little comments.

On further note. Her character, Dayton, losing his mate, would be like a man losing his wife, or a wife losing her husband. Trust me, the pain is crippling.

As for long hair on a man? It's hot... Of course, you're probably bald. I wonder if that's why you have such an issue with the men's sexy long locks.

Sorry Jaz! I'm on my iPad. I didn't mean to press 4stars, I was going for 5... But it doesn't seem like I can correct that now.

My apologies x

The complete lack of communication in ALL of these stories is seriously starting to get on my nerves.

Are you sriously going to tell me that creatures that can live for hundreds or even thousands of years have not figured out the importance of communication?

All this bullshit about the other person not understanding when they haven't made the slightest attempt to explain.

I might not be able to finish this shit.

If they told everything to each other and talked everything out there would b no story it would b just dialog. It would b boring and no one would read it. Surely you youself would prefer an interesting story opposed to a story that nothing ever exciting ever happens?

It's a miracle any of these characters are still alive given how high-strung and prone to violence they are. Maybe some classes in meditation or yoga would help? (Yes, I know the story is more entertaining as it is)