All Comments on 'A Love Story'

All it takes to straighten out a cheating woman is a dominant man with lots of money. Maybe it was true, but what if Jon just fabricated the story about her hubby owing him 30,000? It's been done before. She just takes Jon's word for it without even talking with her spouse (oh, yes, she tried a phone call), and forgives being kidnapped, illegally restrained, and essentially held for ransom, all because: 1) Jon is handsome, 2) Jon is kind (except for the forceful spanking and abduction), 3) Jon is a great fuck (but so were the others she shagged to get even with hubby), and last but not least, 4) Jon is filthy rich (presumably from shady and illicit business practices). Oh, yeah . . . .

absolutely wonderful story. So well written, so real and so much fun to read. LOVE IT. (the English expressions---'rogering,' 'play away' were a delightful bonus.) I only wish I was able to vote more than a 5.

Then I couldn't take any more. Did no one ever teach you how to use punctuation? Learn when to use a comma and a period, so you don't have entire paragraphs that are one sentence, then try writing again.

I really have to agree with that earlier comment. Swap about half of those commas for periods and you have the makings of a good story, but as it is now it's a tough read.

is still a cheating wife.

Loved it !!!! More Please :D

has 8 commas in it? The story other than that is pretty good, but very bad punctuation spoils it all the way down to average.

Who is a slut that fucks any and everybody around her? The only thing missing is her treatments to stop the AIDS infections.

A very different story. Even with the comma salad and statements like "I was insatiable, and he satisfied me every time", I did not find it difficult to read. It could be even better with minor editing, but the fun and surprising story line easily carried me through the rough spots.

More!

There are a great many people in our world just like these 'characters'.

I found the idea of a woman satisfied with a Dominant man to be refreshing. Though in reality, it's been My experience that women say they want it but then change their little minds if they actually get it. I am getting an education in the terminology used by the British. I like your stories.

I've not been your biggest fan but credit schoud be given where it is due-you seem to be .... Improving. Thx for story .

Seems to me that a man was writing the story. Trying to fit into a womans mind. Decent story line. Hated the anal rape part, but to each their own. :)

Only got a little into the story before reacting.

Nice to learn about our cousins across the way. Glad I'm here.

I am not into kidnapping and violence. However, it was the nice kind so I enjoyed the story.

I have to applaud the author for the inventive way dealt with all to familiar story line.

So at the end of the story the happy slut tells us she loves her new husband and of course he ties her up wich is really good. Plust like the idiot that really is she states emphatically that her new husband is hers and of course will never stray. Right ! And we the readers are so buy that crap.

As you use the Brit accent in this story I have to read it a bit more slowly, & concentrate on the different dialog. I like it!! Its kind of a comedy, & yet the "Stockholm Syndrome" is very evident. Thanks for a good read.

The story was too rushed, way too much happening way too quickly. The plot was not bad, just not presented in the best possible way. This story needed more details to set up the situation from the start and then a much longer time frame to develop the relationship between the wife and her abductor. It also needs an editor. There were several times when I had to struggle to understand what the author was trying to convey. I'm not saying it was a terrible story, just that it needed the writing to be better to showcase the plot and characters. Experience will help the author I'm sure. I'm going to read more stories by the author and see if his skills improved over time. If they have then I will be adding him to my favorites list because his plot for this one showed that he has the ability to come up with a good story. Now he just needs to be able to tell that story better.

I liked how they fell in love, but it was a bit too rushed. I think that she may have developed feelings for him, but it would take a little bit longer to turn into something more like love.

well, this one was different. a bastard for a huband and a whore for a wife. so everybody lives happy ever after. bs!!!

it really blows

SCHOUD?????

ONE THING THOUGH

When this comment of yours was posted in 2011 at least your thoughts were decipherable

Unlike your praise of author you DETERIORATED

Hey throw in a ; here and there

This one had a little chaff in it.

Came off a bit like Beauty & the Beast."

May be you are only an ugly old bag!!!

This was a complete waste of reading time. He kidnaps you, ties you up, beats you into submission Then screws you, and you fall in love with him by the next day? Really? Please try to make your stories belivable. or don't write them at all and make us waste out time reading them expecting the heroine to come uot on the winning side. He still keeps beating her?

You need a 80 IQ to get off on it.

He got rid of his debt, got rid of his wife at no cost and got the chance to start again with a clean slate. No worries. No problems. Done and done.

"Stockholm Syndrome"

Jo.isr66

DTS - do the same.

The LESSON:

A woman will dump your ass at the drop of a dime - the first possible opportunity to trade up and she will be gone. That is the true nature of females; that is the characteristic you can trust a woman will exhibit every time - extreme selfishness; a total absence and disregard of promises, oaths, or vows of marriage. Trade up for what? Easy! Money, bigger cock, a six-pack, hair, and the big one - a "bad boy".

Men, you need to be the same; do the same thing: trade up at the first opportunity. Otherwise, you'll find yourself out in the middle of a desert without water...

It's called monkey branching, guys. MGTOW lives!!

just a whore and nothing else.

The misspelling and incorrect word use was a near fatal flaw. It revealed either a lack of education or publication of the story without reviewing it. It was totally unbelievable. No wealthy intelligent man would marry an obvious slut; which she certainly was.

And then her husband divorced her.

Scores way too high on this garbage.

A lot of negative comments, but I liked the story. It is fantasy that two people would fall in love after a kidnapping and two days of the Stockholm Syndrome, but the husband did not deserve her, and, so, the story holds together.

243 stories and still writing shit!?.... there surely will come a time when even u would see the writing on the wall ..right?..