by VF_0079
You have made a good start on what can be a great story. Don't apologise for your writing skills because you are much better than many of the writers on this site. I only picked up on a couple of minor errors but none that detracted from the story. Keep on writing and be sure to have a sequel to this story.
Thank you for your kind words as they embolden me to continue. The second chapter is already awaiting approval and I'm currently working on the third.
It was well written, and started as a good story. The only problem was it ended too soon. Keep on writing.
but this has my attention. hurry up with the next leg :D... shoe, whatever