All Comments on 'A Mind's Wish Ch. 01'

The story starts out slow but builds to a sizzling level. This should lead to several hot and hotter chapters.

I don't think I have read a story where the person had grown tired of controlling people's minds, but is definately a line of thought worth pursuing. Overall the story was good, but could use a little fleshing out and polish. I looked forward to the next chapters.

Story has great potential, but the first part is missing.

I mean the part where Erik discovers his powers and explores how to use them.

Instead the story starts in chapter two (or three), thus losing quite a few percentage points in the rating.

And using psychic powers to rape or otherwise hurt people, where there would obviously be a psychic emotional "transfer" from the "victim" back to the "instigator" loses a few more points.

Oooooooohhhh Baby Yeah. Keep it up. :P

Like the way hes controling everyone but also getting into their Fantasy's