by tjrabbit
i like it , real sounding ,well written , good solid love and sex
made it believable
wish someone would take a poll and report how many mom's and son's have sex in real life
... that the person who said this is "well written" doesn't know how to use apostrophes. It wasn't well written at all, though the story was fun, especially the first half.
This is the first of your work that have read, but it won't be the last.
First off you write in the genre that I like the best and if the rest of your work is as sweet as this story I know that I'll enjoy reading those also.
Thanks for the good read.
... then I realized that it was the dialogue. That was great interlocution between these two lovers. What mom and son said to each other just seemed to flow so naturally. My one criticism is that this story is too short. However, my suggestion would be to write a second and longer chapter and I'll explain why. For example: 1) She admits she divorced her husband because he screwed her best friend and ends by saying, "Maybe tomorrow I'll have more, etc., etc." How could her revelations to her son not lead to more great sex? 2) She says, "You'll have to admit that looking at my ass does as much for you as looking at my tit." Obviously, she likes her ass looked at and played with. Now, a good writer would capitalize on this, don't you think. I hope you consider this.
Loved your story! I got so off! I to am a Motherfucker! Have been since age 14. Mom taught me everthing! Keep up the further adventures!
why does Danny stick his stiff prick up his mother's asshole the first time? His mom's cunt would be a better place for the boy to unload his balls, at least at first.
No offense, but Lauren Bacall wasn't in Casablanca. It was Ingrid Bergman.
I love it!. Not that incorrect punctuation or grammar guarantee the death sentence but it's (did you see that one?) a sign of quality.
The traditional chimpanzee dancing on a keyboard could write a novel but the odds are better with someone who knows the language.
TJ: Not a grammar class here, obviously I did read the story.
Thank You.
Blow jobs MEH! The only place I want my dick and cum is in a pussy.
Top stroke story. Yeah there were some grammar failings but they did not detract from the overall. Well done.
It was brief and exciting as well. Predictable and yet I found myself envying him in their relationship.