All Comments on 'A Mom's Metamorphosis Ch. 01a'

I really liked what you have written, but it is too short to get much more than a tease out of it.I hope that future chapters will be longer, and let the reader get more involved with the characters....Rich

I also liked the way you write, but is really tooo short, to makeout anything from this .. story starts, you get the feel and it ends .... ???? that's bad.

Think about it!!

best luck for next part.

Well done, you've left readers wanting more, I know I do. Very good first story, let's have more!

Needs to continue.

What's the point to this story? Please wait until you have a COMPLETE story before posting! Tease.

The story has potential, but the writing is terrible. Find an editor.

This could be a good tale, but PLEASE GET AN EDITOR!!! ---- Example: "Was it possible that she really be part of some Billy's incest fantasy?!" WTF did that sentence mean???? Get the point?

but, I think it might have potential. Tell us more.

A number of contributors have the same problem: they write a story with a good beginning but then take weeks or even months to resume.

That is a mistake for two reasons: 1) obviously your readers forget the thread of the story if too much time passes between episodes.

2) less obvious but just as important, the writer loses the initial impetus if he does not write when the idea takes shape. Even if you prefer to have your story run in serial form, it is best to have the whole story "fleshed out" (especially good for erotic fiction) before submitting the first episode.

I like how the mother finds creamy sperm on her used panties, and, with her husband being away, figures the culprit can only be her young son, the other balls-bearer in the family.

But you seriously need an editor in any case.

i couldn't get through the first chapter.

The mother/son bond so much deeper than brother/sister.