All Comments on 'A New Level'

Wow what a great story. i hope you might continue this one

Can't wait for the next session.

paragraphs into 4 or 5 pieces--The LIT format does not work well with paragraphs much longer than 4-5 lines

this story, is by far the best ive read on here so far, and its easy for others to see why i say that., dont listen to the commenter who said to shorten your paragraphs, he/she obviously has too much time on their hands to nit-pick about something that, in the greater scheme of things isnt that important

like i said, GREAT story, and im glad to see that its not a 1 and a half page story, filled with lust-filled sex, then abruptly ends, well written, perfect length, although the sex scene, might have either run a little longer, or have been shifted to the middle of the story, to have the build up - the act itself - then the after-glow

just a suggestion =-)

I gotta say, your story was like a movie running through my mind, I can actually visualise all the scenes! You got something here my friend, keep at it!

We're only a month into 2008 but this is the best story of the year. It couldn't get any hotter! WoW!

That, hands down, has to be the hottest story I've read for some time!

Mmmm...I wanna be Sean too...Can't wait to see what happens to him next..

This is a very hot story and needs to be made into a continuing series. Add a few of Mandy's lovers and a couple of parties, a few more one-on-ones, eventually maturing into a loving "family" relationship complete with kids...it would be fun!

A great story as it is and, whether you decide to continue it or not, I thank you for it!

Great story. Please continue with more chapters. One of the best I have read.

What a great story. Had me hard and wet sevaral times. You have left it open for more chapters. I hope this is true. Keep writing!

Awesome story, wish I could give some constructive criticism to you but not possible. Extremely well written with very vivid and imaginable descriptions. I am waiting impatiently for your next chapter in this story that I hope is to follow in near future.

That was a great story. PLEASE continue with more chapters.

That was an excellent story and well written. When will the next chapter be coming out? It would be great to see the relationship continue to grow.

Reasonably slow development, good descriptions of the sex scenes, and terrific imagery of Mandy and the clothes she was barely wearing.

WOW! Thank you so much for your kind words. To be able to share your fantasies with other people and have them not only approve, but to actually enjoy it, is a real ego boost ;-) Thank you all! I'll see if Sean's and Mandy's adventure might be continued in the near future - I kind of like them myself :-)

LikeI said , Sensational

keep in mind that a "taboo" story is no longer taboo when the characters fuck like bonobo chimps, when everyone fucks and is fucked, left and right, day and night... <p>

and, furthermore, although sometimes the line between "porn" and "eroticism" is a fine one, there is a line. in porn, explicitness, vulgarity, and "grossness" become norms, good, and what's intended to be read and seen. <p>

in erotic stories, however, it is titillation, suggestions, forbiddence, slow and consensual and mutual seduction in different styles that count..... <p>

an author needs to know what he/she is trying to do, when nws writes. neither one is necessarily "better" than the other; nor worse. but if you know what you're aiming for and inform your readership that, most will give you meaningful feedback, whether positive or negative.

to long and very boring in the begining not very good in the middle either i couldn't finish it was so bad

very good i always like the subtleties of a story i like how it starts slow but u can still sense a connection an attraction the sex stuff was very erotic and not over done but i would of liked to see you make a bigger deal of him actually penetrating her but excellent work i look forward to more chapters

I thought the story itself was well thought out, very erotic and frankly, I couldn't stop reading it until it was finished. There were a few places that needed some different words, like the one place I think was meant to say something like "I had died" but instead said "I did I did". That and maybe two other places were a bit confusing for a moment, but I worked through it. There were a few places that needed the punctuation revised, other than that I saw nothing wrong with the story and the style of writing was very good. Great read otherwise, please write more! I'm sorry that there are people out there that seem to comment negatively yet they can't seem to post a story themselves for illustrative or other purposes to show good penmanship, punctuation, spelling and grammar correctly. I'm no English major, but if I can spot something like that anyone can. I'm not trying to be critical of your works, just pointing out a few things that I caught in hopes that any author that reads this will get a better grip on their writing. I see the words 'there' and 'their', 'women' and 'woman' used incorrectly on this site all the time amongst others. I'm not thinking I saw this at all on this story, just a general observation for the authors on this site. Please don't stop writing, you have a natural flair for it!

absolute brill cant wait till u decide 2 write another, lookin forward 2 it!!!!!!

the best stories I have read here so far. Another rare 5 star among the three or lower star works this place is riddled with.

That story was great. It makes me almost wanna take the chance and see if I can fuck my own sister

Oh my god, this story is so hot. I... there are no words. Thank you.

I'll sum up my feelings about this story in one word. Damn!

NOW THIS WAS GREAT A BIT LONG BUT VARY,VARY GOOD LOVE IT IT WAS FULL OF SEX AND INCEST BUT WHO CARE ABOUT THAT IT WAS A GREAT READ AND GREAT TIL THE VARY END AND WASN'T BORING AT ALL I GIVE THIS A SKY FULL OF STARS BUT SEEING THEY DON'T HAVE THAT,,,,,, 5 PLUS WILL HAVE TO DO FOR NOW ................. ,,....................."R".......................

that was one of the hottest syories i have ever read. makes me want to go and do likewise, 'cept i don't have a sister. Guess i need to find a stand-in, huh ?!

Wow that was hot!! I too love a slow start and to let the anticipation build ;) Makes my pussy sopping wet and hungry for some cock!! Please do write more!!

really love the story! great build up and i love the ending. but, do you think you could write a follow up story that continues this story? i'd love to read more about this very passionate and loving couple.

No sexual tension, predictable, cliche ending. 3 stars.

More, please.....

Contrary to what one anonymous critic has said about this story (among others), "A New Level" is a wonderfully satisfying erotic tale. Some miserable souls are happy only when they're putting others down--usually behind the cloak of anonymity. Ignore them!

Yikes!! This is the absolutely best story that I have ever read. I was hard the whole time. Even without my meds for ED. Sure hope you continue with this one. THANK YOU!!

One of the very best - what a lucky B Sean is. Wish my sister had been called Amanda. Keep up the good work.

Loved the story and would love to see a sequel!

A lot, lot more - anytime, like now for instance !

I loved the story, so damn hot !

Rapier

It loses a star for me with the threesome. It's proof positive this isn't a true love story. Would Bro be willing to have a threesome with another guy??? It's exactly the same thing. Why would Sis want to share her true love with another woman??? It would serve Sis right if Bro fell in love with Amy and left her. MOST sharing husbands lose their wives eventually and deservedly so.

Someone mentioned could a threesome always remain faithful to the other two if one starts getting stronger feelings,the answer is yes,because in this both Sean and Mandy clearly have a deeper love for their sibling than with Amy,but does that mean they would cut Amy out of their relationship,no because people are attracted to others for different reasons,so as long as Sean,Mandy and Amy remain generous and caring then why shouldn't they be able to have a happy threesome forever.

Now one thing in the story stuck out at me when Mandy said she wanted to bring Sean into her world of debauchery and kink and Sean was all for it,so could Mandy truly love Sean and still be in lust with him,absolutely because lust is always temporary while having sex,but love is eternal.Lastly I just wish Sean,Mandy,and Amy had formed a connection and been in a threesome relationship,but oh well good story otherwise.

I couldn't get past the first page. The cock teasing sister making him wear bikini bottoms. Glad I didn't read on as I found out he was a "boy toy" in the end.

The first part of this story was not very good she forced him to wear her bikini bottoms and then the teasing of him and control him and then into a 3 some way in only 3 days ,,, it read like their was no deep love between the brother and sister,, only her using him as a toy ,, for that it’s a 2⭐️ Story for me

(11/25/2023) The only word that comes to mind is “WOW”! This great erotic work goes on my list. Thank you. But I’m saddened that you are no longer submitting stories.

LOL… I just read the comments before mine. Has anyone seen what the men wear on the beaches in Europe? I swear the shorts seem to be interchangeable with the women’s. At least he only had to wear it once and indoors for her. Now, if she had asked him to wear a dress and let her lead him around on a collar then, yeah, I can see a reason for bailing, LOL. The commentators lost out big time by bailing, IMO. The sex was outstanding.

Interesting premise.

But ALL sex scenes are rushed. Need to slow down. Need extended teasing/touching/getting to know each other's bodies.

Seems in too much of a hurry to get to an orgasm.

Three stars.

San Diego

Agree with previous comments. Barely adequate story with terrible writing style. Way to accelerated plot line - First with the bikini bottoms and then the speedos. Give ma a break. Nobody in California (except some gays) wears speedos. Board shorts are de rigueur. Then the old "applying lotion" trope - All in all a solid 2/5.