All Comments on 'A New Valentine'

You had a decent start and a good finish , but the middle ruined it.

It is erratic and jumpy. No real development. The wife is as much of a slut as the woman who is with her husband. Why do such people even get married?

The basic premise is a good one, but needed to be proofed and edited better. Also, the ending was too forced. Hope you try again.

It was a light story and fun to read. I thought the action proceeded believably for the kind of story that it is.

It was quite quick into the sex. He delivered the flowers and then was pulling her dressing gown open? I'm quite new at this but have been reading some advice... The characters should have a reason for having sex.

and sexy...

How much more fucking before these two guys become permanent valentines?

A little silly.

Great story!! Is there more to "cum"???

Use an editor... it will help.