All Comments on 'A Night at the Manor Hotel'

I enjoyed it much better than usual rubbish!

It might be advisable to book the room for a second night to continue plowing the cute front desk clerk, aye?

Good story. Would be nice to know if anything develops further or if he just stays at the hotel from time to time while working on the new project.

But get an editor, not just a spell-checker. Typos that make a real word pass spell-check but are still a typo.

Oh, Jon, do go back and learn puncutation and sentence structure, or find an editor. The best of tales can be defeated by reader confusion.

Could be awesome but the typos were a little distracting and I had to giggle each time at the sight of the word virginia. Please continue and maybe she has a friends who needs deflowering or at least a good experience with a man to nullify a previous bad experience.

"definitely"

You have the idea and it was entertaining. The comments on grammar could be dealt with in a simple way: Be careful not to slip into the present tense (which you did several times). Consistency in tense is essential, with good writing usually in the past (as most of your story was). Just don't use s instead of ed at the end of your verbs. Example: Jon slipped off her panties (good). Jon slips off her panties (no good). Proof yourself and see what I'm saying here.

But for the love of all things sacred, please use spell check and get an editor.

Really liked the story. please write more, but read them through for the niggling spelling errors .

Yes well crafted storyline and the few errors dd not detract from the plot, so more please

excellent buildup and ending!