by Penelope Street
What a lovely story.
So nice to see two people manage to overcome their fear and find each other.
Well done.
Oh, darling. This was such a pretty story. And it all turned out rather intense in the end. A+, lovey. Marvelous. :)
Great story of regrets, lost opportunities and second chances. Nicely done!
Penny,
You are a wicked, wicked girl! Love lost, hopes dashed, flames flicker in the breeze of life only to be fiercly rekindled as they consume two happy lovers. That was beautifully writen. You've a wonderful way of setting the mood as your stories progress. BRAVO!!! Please, take another bow for your audience.
Sincerely,
Mike
Nicely portrayed story of insecurity.
After all the fabrication, I fear for 'what happens next'!
Penny,
You may actually write better than you critique, and that's saying a lot. I'm not sure, though. I'll have to re-read this before I can make a final decision. But seriously, that was a fine piece of writing.
Rumple
Well, damn. I came here as you are part of Group A, in Minsue's writerly contest and I thought to just try to get an idea of your style.
You brought tears to my eyes twice, when each revealed the truth, but I am a sentimental sap anyway, so it may not mean much.
I do feel like I have discovered a writing soulmate, as they way you played with emotions and circumstances is so like some of my work that it felt uncanny. Never mind that I named a daughter, my youngest one and last one, Penelope also, my Penny.
I must add, to be honest, that the style of the ending, the words you chose, disappointed me, but that is a stylistic opionion and not a criticism.
So a couple hours later, I know I will not have enough energy left to continue trying to determine each of the authors in our little exercise but it was a thoroughly worthwhile and pleasurable diversion and it was of my own choosing, although I did not expect to be drawn to read until the conclusion, but I just had to know the ending.
Thank you
Amicus....John Cole
You write so very well, with realistic converstations that convey so much feeling and action. I was moved to tears of joy more than twice. I can't wait to read the rest of your stories here. Are there other stories or books that you have written? I would gladly buy them. Keep writing, please.
In your limited space you build your main characters like a Shakespeare. Given the latitude of a full length novel I am sure you are (or could be) a published author.
An excellent story well delivered that kept me captivated to the very end. Thank you, Penelope.
~ Dave
Well-paced, with a gradual unfolding of your characters which keeps up the reader's interest. Dialogue "sounded" real without the difficulties of duplicating "real" speech. Danielle's difficulties were well-planned before you started writing and so skillfully foreshadowed. I didn't get quite the same sense with Craig, but as you were saving his situation for the reveal at the end, that's fair. Good romantic story - even the sex was romantically drawn! Very well done indeed. I look forward to reading what comes next in your queue!
You are a fantastic story teller. The story finished as I suspected but the twists and turns leading to completion very terrific. THANK YOU.
This isn't a romance, it is a cheating wife/loving wife story!
What a wonderful little love story, full of angst and unfulfilled emotion. Your writing is superb. Iām so glad I found your site. An easy 5-ššššš