by penguinlust
This is a well-framed story. The amount of set-up was proportioned well to the amount of sexual content, and the tension was well-written. The title is also nice. I enjoyed it, thanks.
Intresting fromat, nice play and use of words. Lovely flow to keep you intrested. Well done.
I loved it. The build up was fantastic but try adding a little more detail in to make the entire story fantastic.
As a child, I would play pretend games with elaborate plots, and this sunshine woman reminds me of one of my games.
a fragment of a tale, an idea for expansion, later, into a story.
This is the second piece of the author's I've read and the other was even a smaller fragment. Guess I’ll check the length of the next one before I bother.