by Kat73
nothing like two girls finding some pleasure...I like this a lot!
I like a few more details and lots more seduction , but I loved it all the same.
As most men, truly enjoy a girl-girl story. This one so realistic and sensual! thank you!
...you enjoy what you write! Love of subject matter shines through. This is only the third of your stories I've read. A suggestion for a writing exercise: try a third person point of view. Converting this story to third person might be fun. It's more than just changing all instances of I to she and making sure the verbs agree. You have a different point of view. What to leave in, what to leave out, as the song says, and the story is DIFFERENT. But the same.
If that's your first, it's a lovely start..... I think I will just have to read more