All Comments on 'A Night Out Alone'

Hell of a fantasy, and your writing structure is great. But, spelling, spelling, spelling. Come on, spell-check doesn't help when you're using the wrong tense. The multitude of those kind of errors quickly becomes a miasma of distraction and irritation.

Makes me want to find a bar like this... but I'm neither a redhead, nor built like this slutty angel... but still... it was fucking hot!

I love it, fuck the spelling mistakes I am literally soaking wet. If I weren't on the chubby side I'd go shopping for a very revealing dress and have a night out alone. Wow wow wow.

I really enjoyed your story. That was totally hot.

Excellent erotic story, but badly in need of good editing. A compelling and exciting first draft.