by KellyJames
What can anyone say?. the story was short and on the verge of, this could never happen. I would think some people get moved or heated up by reading your story however this was not the case for me!. I ask that you keep at it because I see better things coming from your pen..thanks. dan
I loved the "dirty" talk between them , it was sexy and ferocious without being nasty and vulgar . There's nothing quite like telling someone what you want and what you're about to do . Nice work .
How was her orgasm? Where did she feel it? Did she have a small one followed by a larger one? How about daddy: where did he feel the urge to cum first? Toes? Lower back? How many times did he spurt?
Don't forget detailing the orgasms and you'll have 5/5. ;)
That was perfect from start to finish. I am soaking wet needing more. Please don't stop there. More to come?