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I think I'm in love..........................with this story that is! Keep the chapters coming soon, please!!!!!!

why are they wearing collars like a common dog? why has none of them ever heard of female weres?

Good start but you have a lot to explain. Not a big fan of the collars but I guess that is how they keep themselves from turning? As for her being the first female were well lots to explain there as well. I'll be back for the next chapter to see what more you have in store.

very cool story, im very interested in finding out about each of the characters background especially red,and seeing how this story develops

You have me totally confused! Why is she running and who is she running from? We need more background. Don't think much of the collars they are wolves and not a pet dog, collars on a were I would have thought would be degrading! Like I said I am confused but will keep reading your tale!

I agree with Wille that you need to give us more background. We get the hint that she is running from any of the packs she's had contact with. We see the dilemma with her being the only known female in those packs. But, aside from that we know nothing and I think since it is the basis of her personality, her actions & mannerisms, etc. it is very important that you give this info. That said, you have me intrigued with the pack we're meeting. I don't think that the conceited guy she pegged as Alpha is actually the alpha. I have a feeling it is this Col.

I like the characters you've begun to develop. I do hope you will develop most of them further so we get to know them. It will improve the story and feel more real, give you the ability to avoid limiting yourself to a small and therefore boring, cast. (and leave room for you to do later stories later if you decide you are into this--but I'm sure you're focussed on this only)..

Now, when you described the young 'pups' in situations other than the return from the run, I really didn't know if they were in wolf form or not.. I think it is best if you flat out say someone is in wolf form if they are and you can leave it to be assumed they are in human form if not noted. It seems that the collars seem to prevent them from going into wolf form which how you ID'd them as human in this chapter, it seems. Of course it will be awkward if you continue to mention collars being on and off for the rest of the story.

I don't agree with Wille on the fact that you're giving them 'dog characteristics.' First of all, dogs are canines as are wolves so they have common traits. That said, you are using the collar as a way to keep them in human form. I like it. It is creative. I'd definitely like to know how it works. Is it magical? Is it made from a certain material? I think an explanation will help.

I like this story and think it has great promise. I hope you can take the stuff above (I know I wrote alot!) as my trying to assist. I do a lot of beta reading for authors, so I tend to be in that frame of mind oftentimes when I read. I hope some of it helps you as you go forward. Keep at it and update soon please!

I love to get comments.

Of course, I do get an extra thrill when people are complimentary - and wow Anonymice 1, 2 and 4 - you really made my day! I actually did write a blogpost recently celebrating kind Anonymous comments. You keep me publishing my writing.

Sara Rasmussen has obviously done a great job for me as there are no complaints about my grammar and rather opaque writing style! which I usually get a few of, so you can see I'm working in response to comments.

Chapt 2 is already in the system, due to be uploaded soon. It's a steamy sex scene. I put it in Romance (although it may get put back in here), since no collars come off in it, ie., people stay human.

Speaking of collars, I recognise that there is a particular werewolf erotica genre which has certain traditions, conventions and tropes and that I'm not writing quite that kind of werewolf story. Anonymous3 and Willieone, I apologise if I'm twisting anyone's tail in writing against the grain. One of the things I like about writing werewolf stories is exploring ways in which we experience and also manage instinctive, physical impulses, what we think of as our animal rather than our rational side. Obviously the collars symbolise a group of people who find their animal side hard to control trying to get a grip on potentially dangerous behaviour. As Cannd says, dogs are a sub species of Canus Lupus, the grey wolf; the werewolves in this pack sometimes behave like really fun pet dogs, some people like that and some find it annoying - let me know how you feel.

AzhureDragon, there will be more background in Chapt 3, which I'll post up today. (May take a few days to go live as there is a competition going on.)

Cannd - you can't give me enough feedback! Write as much as you like. PM me if you want to write even more! Be my friend on Facebook and hassle me about the background information I haven't yet provided!

Most of the pack will get their own stories told, although I'm having trouble getting a specialist reader for Chapt. 4 in which Max has a quiet night out (ROFL!).

Read the Werewolf in Office Clothing story to.learn about Col.

I am having mixed feelings about your werewolf style, NaokoSmith, but I am willing to read the next chapter or two to learn more before I deciding if I should move on or put you on my favorites lost when I finally get around to making an account on Lit. Looking forward to chapter 2!

LOL! I hope I make it to your Favourites List, rather than being one of the Favourites you Lost.

In my editor's defence, I should say that A Werewolf in Office Clothing was published before she came into my life. I hold my hand up to admit it's quite badly written although I still like the story and several other people did too - that was why I decided to write A Pack of Tales.

You can learn more about Col and his girlfriend Bryony in that first story and there are some in jokes you will appreciate better in Chapt. 2 if you've read it. It isn't a necessary requisite for A Pack of Tales, 'tho - bit like all of the sex scenes which you can take or leave according to your personal likes and dislikes.

Good story,,,but collars on wolves,,,this is a new spin on things.and im hoping you will eventually explain them,as you are the only writer i have seen with collars before,and it seems a bit strange,,,,keep up the good work...

Oh my oh my! This is an enticing entry into the story following A wolf in office clothing. (shoot, did I get that right?) I'm so intrigued to read more and to find out why (if there is a reason) that female werewolves are so rare. This is a special pack, I can tell, and I'm really looking forward to learning more about them. I think the collars, though maybe not a common werewolf convention, makes perfect sense for a group of people trying to control their baser natures and live among other people. A collared dog (wolf) is a tame dog, yes? There are no rules in werewolf lore, and this addition is really fascinating. I'm rushing ahead to the next chapter!