All Comments on 'A Play...for Keeps'

Some extended teasing next, perhaps.

Hpe this is the first chapter in a long series. my too young gf(only38) loved it. I notice this is your only story on the site. Love to read more but your submission datemakes me worry that you have gone elswear with your wonderful writing like your alterego N.

Please, oh please, come back and continue on with this story! You've captivated me, I need to know what more he plans to do with her. You're so very talented, Dreamchaisr!

Reveal a very sensual lady who has not only the ability to recognize her desires for what they are, but to articulate them in a delightfully salicious manner.

You are truly a very gifted writer and I enjoy every one of your stories that I read. Keep going, it will be great fun to see what develops as you progress.

had to quit after a few paragraphs. You used way too many elipses. They got annoying very quickly. They are to be used as a way to extend a thought beyond the words. You used them to connect sentences. Try it without them and you'll look much more professional and people will enjoy reading your work more.

I just want to thank all of you for your comments and I want all of you to know that I take all the criticism to heart and use it in my next story. I have gotten comments about the elipsis issue two times now and in the new stories that I'm writing I have almost eliminated them. I got into that bad habit chatting and didn't even realize I was doing it, but after several comments on the two stories I've posted here under this name I realized my error, and am taking steps to make my stories more enjoyable.

Again thank you and please keep writing. I love to hear from you all good or bad. That's the only way I can get better.

Dreamchaisr

was the sex we didnt see in phantom of the opera, thats wat i thot of while i was reading, it was ssssoooooo hott thank you! ;)

The writing style takes a little getting used to, but love the way it displays the character. I'm hooked enough to want to see more. =)