by Avery_Amore
Good story, well thought through.
Plenty of interest to follow!
Great descriptions and pacing. I look forward to the next installment.
WTF is A rake,, other then Apiece of equipment used to clean the yard
Since I do not wish to learn about cleaning the fucking yard i will leave you too your trash and carry on
OHHH,, I will give it an ace for being there lmfao
For the commenter who asked "wtf is a rake?", "rake" is a very old word meaning " a man given to immoral or improper conduct". The closest modern word to it that I can think of would be "lech", or maybe "player/playa".
The only thing about the story which didn't ring true to me: rake or not, I would think that he would have ascertained Amy's relationship with Mitch before stripping her naked and groping her. But maybe that's just me.
Interesting and captivating start to what appears will be a story of complex relationships. My only crit thus far is your use of stomach when you describe the abdomen. The stomach is an internal organ. If you need a layman's term for abdomen I like belly or torso. You have an interesting narrative voice. Thanks for sharing.