by WishFull
Loved the story it was very well written and made me wet in less than five minutes I would love to read a squill p.s great character names amber coincidentally has the same name as me in real life in short loved it loved it loved.
Thank you for what I hope is the start of a story line. Left me hot, bothered (leaking) and wanting more!!
There was an abrupt shift between past and present tenses, and then back again, which was a little disconcerting. The ending, too, was sort of abrupt.
Great story, but you spent more time describing her goth outfit than taking her virginity. You could have spent more time putting the details where they matter most. Keep writing though, you do show promise.
You could have had a chapter 2 with both of the girls when they went to college.
... but the ending is week. No need to try to tie up the details and tell another story all in one short paragraph. Otherwise, first rate stroke