All Comments on 'A Really Stupid Bet'

But it ended to soon, Your writing style is very good the stroy flowed well just the ending was a bit too soon. Looking for more from you on Stacie

I think the reason I don't like this is that the female comes across as unresourceful. The bet was stacked against her, with those 6" heels. I would have taken them off and ran for the 2 miles. It's a park that is used by people during the day right? So broken glass all over the sidewalk seems a bit unlikely. Or how about take those shoes, break the damn heels off, then run like hell. While you're at it, yank that skirt up around the waist - park is supposedly deserted, you're dressed like a hooker anyway, so what if you flash some thong panties.<br><br>

It's too obvious where the story is going. There's no real build up or sense of surprise. I would have enjoyed it more if the girl actually showed some initiative and went about making that bet a little more even.

<P>Lots of little sexual sparks (which unfortunately go nowhere) and a continuous roller-coaster between the sexual tension and the distractions with the mechanics of the plot.

<P>Yet the humor that is present, as well as the switch from "really good bet" to "stupid bte" have charmed this reader.

<P>I look forward to other submissions.

<P>Thanks!

Stpry was unfinished.

It is not finished.

Love the story