All Comments on 'A Second Chance'

Great story! Is David's daughter's name Bobbie or Bonnie? Or is this a a subtle suggestion that a sequel story is being written wherein David's daughter has a split personality disorder? (Seems unlikely but giving the author the benefit of the doubt here.)

Get a notepad and use it to keep track of the character's names. The ending seemed to be rushed, like the author ran out of steam or patience. There were some spelling errors. 3.5 Stars.

Enjoyed your work nice story kind of sugary sweet for Lit and no conflicting areas BUT ain't a thing wrong with it ! *****

Great story. Would have been even better (6) with an epilog or even a chapter 2. Thank you.

Sweet, tender, and romantic

Best story I have read in a long time.

PROOF READ

You have good stories, but they lack from lack of proof reading

Wonderful, 10 stays! Please write another chapter, because Bobbie needs a mom to guide her to womanhood and Kerry needs a dad to spoil her more. Also, the baby in Amy's tummy needs mammy and daddy!

Bobbie/Bonnie - both names used for same person. Otherwise very enjoyable. thank you

Hopeful. Weathering stormy periods are better for ascertaining character and compatibility than just pleasant/fair weather friends.

This definitely need chapter two, please

Enjoyable even on second read. Will be back. Ever considered a chapter 2?

Good story, but you have a couple of things to rewrite. first who is Bonnie? (search for it), second, David just finished saying he had forgot to get her phone number or email address, but then proceeded to phone her. -1*

Great story about recovery. Read comments about some grammar issues however I saw nothing tto detract form the wonderfully rebirth tale. Thanks for sharing.

needs outside editor to make it a five. lots of bad grammar.

don't remember...

fair, some grammar problems...

Author silent for last 12 years, so no specific comments. A sweet story. Glad I read it.

Wonderful well written!

I am amazed that some readers are upset that the story is not tailored to their exact requirements. Are all people like this or is it just those that are so self entitled?

What can I say that hasn't already been said? Nothing probably, but here goes. First, what happened to this author. He puts out all these stories and says, in his bio, that there will be more. Then nothing. I guess we'll never know but it's certainly a loss. I have to agree with others that the ending was a little too abrupt and the seemingly random idea to "give ourselves a year to move forward." didn't make any sense. Frankly, I'm not even sure what it means. Up to that point though, I loved everything about the story and I could see people thrown to this set of circumstances behaving in this manor. A little sappy, sure. Highly coincidental, and well beyond any statistical probability, absolutely, but so what? Typos, misspellings, wrong words, missing words, tense changes, name changes all that and more, but, again, so what? All, or most, of the above can be found in most stories here. Would it be even better if there were no errors? Sure, but I'd far rather read an error filled story that makes me laugh, makes me genuinely care for the characters, maybe even makes me shed a tear or two, rather than one that is perfectly written but does none of those things for me. Also, I really liked seeing the POV of all the characters. Usually, while you get to read what everyone is doing, you only get to know what one person is thinking. I enjoyed getting into each of their heads. Five stars!

POV changes too frequent. Felt too much like solving a puzzle to read it.

Sweet story, but I would have preferred it take over the course of around a year and a half to be engaged.

Like cotton candy, a sweet empty treat. Why can’t LIT authors learn the difference between “in and into,” and “literal and figurative.”

Another 5 star effort. I don't know if you ever check in on your stuff or even if you are able too,, as every one of your stories were published clear back in 2010. I hope you are well and life is good for you. The two stories I've read say you are deserving of that.

Great job; thanks for sharing your work!

Very touching and a wonderful story. I wish you would have caught the name changes from Bobbie to Bonnie a couple of times.

Far too sugary,all that was missing was her telling him the earth moved after he shagged her.

Love the story. AAAAA+++++

⭐⭐⭐⭐

Read this story several times and love it everytime I read it

Hmm, enjoyed, but the ending was abrupt.

A very good rebound and love story with bounds of inspiration. 5 shiny stars are in order indeed. Thank you so much for your sharing your talent.

'wildbill'

Web-Spinner: You spin some great stories (tales).

i can't help but agree with Overcritical on this one. this felt like the McDonald's hamburger of Romance stories, all cookie cutter and plastic-y. i enjoyed it for what it was but i know i'll forget about it in 10 minutes. 3 stars.

I hate living my life vicariously through wonderful stories like this

guess that about says it all

A nice romantic story. Kind of reminds me after meeting my loving second wife she had four lovely kids. We got married and it lasted 40 years before she passed lying next to me. 5 stars for your story

I'm forced to agree that mechanically this story is terrible. To me there are three key ingredients to a story: plot, character development and dialog. Overall there is the grammar and style which make the story more or less readable and enjoyable. The plot was trite and had no zip at all. The characters were predictable and too good to be true. The dialog was not bad although it certainly sounded like the author hadn't finished high school. The many other comments about the grammar says it all. The "I"/"me" problem that so many authors have is neatly worked out: it's always used incorrectly here. The author doesn't even have the courtesy to proofread his own work and often calls the older girl Bonnie instead of Bobbie. The past tense rules are clearly a mystery to the author. The truth is that if the story is stimulating to the reader's imagination the mechanics can be acknowledged and then overlooked. The mediocre quality of the plot and characters makes the grammar more annoying. 3*

I guess I never knew what a whiny bunch of bitches porn addicts are. Poor grammar, kiss my ass!

I must be a sucker for semi-cheesy love stories. Loved it, despite the grammar glitches.

cute...poor english

author doesn´t know the diff between her and me and her and i

lots of other grammar glitches...

Amy and Kerry joined Bobbie and I for dinner. what???

grade 9 english...

This is at least my third reading of this tale. I really do enjoy it every time I read it.

The ending was a bit of a let down. I really can’t understand why the hell they waited 12 months. Anyway I still gave you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

lovely story...however, as is common on this site, author cannot distinguish the difference between the verbs to lie and to lay. aint the same!

likewise, the misuse of between you and i and between you and me. again, those have different meanings, and are not interchangeable. middle school english!

To "Anonymous 09/13/20", on the second page it is explained why they didn't know about a mutual ending to their flights, "She and Kerry had taken a different airlines but as coincidence would have it, we had arrived at the same time."

Got it?

But really! They didn’t know they were on the same plane together going home after the cruise???

Very nice story.....a little distracting when Bobbie became Bonnie a few times....but still a very good read....*5*

Sometimes you need a short but quality story like Second Chance. Well written and entertaining. Thank you for sharing. 5 Stars CC

Curious to know what Amy does for a living.

Really a good story. Sex scenes were done just right. 5*

A very nice romantic one. Very gentle, even the sex scene at the end. Well done.

A very nice love story. GOOD JOB

I really enjoy this story. I am having a great day finding some of my favorite stories that are so fun to read!!! I have read this story several times over the years. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story.

1 abs etc and hasn't been out much since wife died?

2 I try to suspend reality when I read but too much sometimes

3 goes to daughter's events and no other parent(s) mentioned

4 business and daughter reading drinking morning?

5 age difference daughters. Movie night age interferes other activities make age difference closer

Etc

Excellent gentle love story

But sometimes, for the best of us... Don't know why you've stopped posting, I've searched numerous times and haven't found anything new under this pen name anywhere, nothing on SOL. But if you're ever of a mind to, we'll welcome you back with open arms. Signed: BTW

I love this story. Very romantic and well written. I have read this story several times and just cant give anything but a 5star rating eventhough there is one misspelled word. Page 2 final night on the cruise. When he says they should meet for breakfast the next morning because Bonnie would never forgive him if she was t able to say goodbye. LOL I thought her name was Bobbie. Still an excellent story. Keep up the excellent work.

I lost my wife of 44 yrs. almost 3 yrs ago. I understand Davids love of his lost wife so very very much. We had a very deep and abiding love and it still hurts after almost 3 yrs now. I still to this day sort of live like a hermit and only go out to pay some bills or shop at the grocery store. I am 72 so I am not looking for another love. I can't go through that hurt ever again.

This story is one of the best love stories on any romance website, well written and a nice slow buildup of the relationship between the 2 families. Not just rutting animal sex. Well thought out and very loving. Thank you so very much for giving a lost soul something to hold onto. I am a man but I did go through a lot of Kleenex reading this story.

Even on my second reading.

I hate unfinished stories. This one ended right when it should. Thanks.

Also thank you for no anal.

Very high writing skill. Great use of dialog. I did not find obtrusive language or spelling problems.

Fortunately did not have crude language or cussing. But was as polished, elegant and gentlemanly as David, the protagonist.

A lovable tale. And that's what I did -- loved it.

Paul in Oklahoma

I think I'll add it to my favorites list. If it's good enough for Moog Player, it is certainly good enough for me! I gave you Five Stars yet again!

I to wandered why they wait twelve months to seal the deal as Kookaburra8 stated in his comments, especially since the two kids were quite happy with the current situation and excepted that their parents loved each other as well as them. Plus this story really did end far to abruptly for my liking. But saying that, the storyline was brilliant and deserves ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ ...

I would like very much say thank you I love your story ahope to read more from you I keep going back and read your story over and over I have been down in the dumps after my wife of 26years left me back in march and I have good and bad day but I read your story and smile as I remember better time in my life Thank you

I am not sure why the author wrapped up this story so fast and somewhat abruptly at the end.

Nice, gentle story, just rather abrupt in its ending.

This is a wonderfully romantic love story. It's heart-warming and touching, made especially so by the relationship between the father and his 13 year old daughter. As a father of three sons, I now am convinced that I lost out and not just my estranged wife when we were only able to have sons.

I like also the honoring of his ex-wife's love, though I firmly believe that death is the one reason that loving another woman as a wife is totally acceptable. But having been estranged from a wife who gave up on me 18 years ago -- while still being faithful sexually to my marriage vows -- I can understand the reluctance to let go of his love for his dead wife. She's still the only woman I've been with sexually, without love it's disgusting, empty and demeaning.

Another beautifully written Romance story. I too wondered why they waited 12 months to seal the deal as they say. I really couldn't see their lodgic in doing so. Also I too thought the story ended too abruptly, you could have easily wrote another page or two describing the happiness and joy of the children especially the little one when told that they would have a Mum and Dad in their lives again. Other than that, a brilliant ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ story..thank you..

Nice read thank you for posting it.

Great writing

You have a great way of writing - when sex becomes a part of your story, it's there but no grunting and yelling. Keep up the great stories. Gave you a five. In the event some wonder why I tell when I give a five star rate, I do so to allow the author to understand that I find his stories well written.

I have read 2 of your stories now. you are great. I enjoy good romance stories without the extra sex. you deliver very well. you show nothing since year 10 I guess you were to good stay here. are you published some where else? Please let me know.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

I have always LOVED this story, hence the reason that it's in my Favorite's list. Keep up the great work Web_Spinner. As always, I keep checking your list for new stories and hopefully you might surprise us with a new one some day soon. In the meantime, thank you for letting us read you what you've posted thus far.

MoogPlayer

2 traits hard to find, but when they find you, be prepared. TK U MLJ LV NV

The way you develop stories, you are not a good writer, you are a great story teller.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

The sex is there and it is tasteful and terrific, but the story doesn't particularly need it. It had me rooting for the characters from the get-go. Thanks for sharing your talents.

I periodic purge my favorites,,, and this one lasted many purges... that reflective how much it touched me.

Thank you for you story

HKL

It's a good thing he makes quicker decisions at work than he does in his personal life. All in all, a good feeling story.

Thanks for a heart warming story.

a truely wonderful story of a love that many of us search for and never find. I enjoyed every sentence and found a second and third reading just as good as the first time I read it. Saratu

I guess that some one should alert CNN and Fox news that a writer here made a typo when submitting a story.Come on is that the worst thing that you can come up with to grip about when someone hits the n key when they ment to hit the b key which just happens to be right next to each other. I some times think that some go looking for things to complain about when reading these stories.

Loved the story. But who is/was Bonnie?

Like Irish Eyes this story is a main stream romance that should be published as such. It is not in any manor erotic. It is a wonderful story of love and romance.2

wished for nother page or two, still cast 5 stars*****

read

5 *****s

excellent

glad you gave David and Amy a future after experiencing the pain and suffering of death and betrayal. thanks

and sometimes an umbrella helps with the dampness, TK U MLJ LV NV

It was a very good story. However, it ended a bit soon. It would have been nice to experience the joy little Kerry would have felt when she found out she was going to have a new Dad and a Sister.

Great work and Thanks!

Reasonably well crafted story with the switching perspectives well set up and executed -

Always a challenge to balance the growth and the intimacy of a new relationship especially in a story with people coming from different directions for their history and baggage -

Nice job

Well structured love story - and theres nothing wrong with that. I liked it.

A bit more care with spelling and grammar and I would have given a 5.

Suggest you avail yourself of the editors polishing.

great story read it over again, And again it is 5 stars

accidentally gave lower

gave it a 5. i love a good love story.

Easy rerading and holds the interest right to the end,,,, not to mention that it is a fine story.

Great Story when will part 2 come out

Wow! That's the first literotica story that's brought a tear to my eye AND a hard on! Well written, perfectly believable characters, wonderful build up. Looking forward to more from Web_spinner!

I'm always amazed at what some authors and many of the readers think is romance. So many stories gear romance as meeting someone and jumping into the sack immediately.

Romance is the nurturing of a relationship letting the physical happen when it's ready.

This author know how to write a romance story.

I give a ten.

Well I would if I could.

Thanks and I wish you would write more.

How could anyone not like and enjoy this story! All of the major characters are excellently described and likeable. The plot is believable. There were so few errors that they were hardly noticeable, I only recall two or three. Thanks!

Lovely story. That little 13 year old sure knew how to manipulate her dad and match make! I could see my two daughters doing the same thing easily! I agree with Bruce22 that waiting another year was unneccessary as I was convinced by the story that they were in love and had melded their two little familys already... Still, why dissect a great little romantic story?

I did say it was just outstanding; right???

In a comment re a different story, someone mentioned that they liked the way you portrayed children. In this story I got to appreciate it myself. Well, now I'm committed to reading every single one of your stories. Thanks! [Gualterio]