by LaPatitMort
Liked the story but it seemed to me that he came on too strong to her and should have taken a little more time to seduce her and tell her he loved her. He risked the little girl catching them when she was calling for her mommy and not letting her go to her baby. Lastly, I think that the author should have carried the story somewhat further. A second part is definitely in order.
I thought it was just and outstanding bro/sis tale. More would be better, but enough is still enough. Thanks for your storyl
It was good, but a little out there. But you should for sure make a second one