by kaizen4ever
One of the very, very best on this site. Should have left this for one of them competition doobies this site runs every now and then. Friggin brilliant! I was going to say that that last line was a killa, but the whole bloody story was fantastic. I had to keep looking ahead to make sure there were more pages to read!
Thank you author, your efforts are very greatly appreciated.
that was really,really good! i really hope you continue writing,because that was an interesting way to write an incest story!! i look forward to reading more of your work!
This story got me so riveted I forgot the time - so intense, so different, so sensual - 5 stars -thanks - I am already looking forward to your next story :)
I'm not usually a ghost story reader but this one had me spell bound. I look forward to future submissions!
Thanks for the great story!
I loved the story. If there has ever been a story like this on Literotica, I never saw it. This is very original thinking and a fresh, new story. I am ashamed to say I rarely read this long of a story with this little sex lol! If you enjoy writing, please continue to do so. You have a gift. Thank you.
Not the horniest story, but probably the best I have read in decades.
Very well written indeed.
not into ghost stories this would have been better without the sibling aspect and if it was in the sci-fi area
Amazingly well written; you are a very talented writer. Spellbinding story had me gripped 'til the end.
I have read alot of stories on literotica but this is the best by far. So good infact it's the first time i've taken the time to leave a comment. You have a true gift for writing !! If you keep writing stories like this I for sure will keep reading them. Thanks you so much...
This story was just amazing. I usually never comment on stories, but this once was so well written and dragged me into it full force. You have a true gift for writing and am awaiting part 2.
INCREDIBLE ! WOW! Sexy, erotic, well written, riveting, Please write again, more...
I am favoriting you and will look for more!
finally a story truly deserving of 5 stars
great story telling, wonderful character development
i literally couldn't STOP reading from page 2 on
i cant wait for more.
again excellent story, a few typos but they took nothing away from this
all i can say is bravo
Seldom does a writer encompass so many aspects of a story, weaving the threads of the tapestry into a tale that must be read. The nuance, the attention to detail, the character development, all play together to present a genuinely exceptional story. I look forward to more submissions. 5*. I would give more if I could.
One of the best stories I've read. Wonderful character development. Please continue writing. You certainly have the gift.
Just an outstanding story and virtually flawless. More please, and thanks.
Really loved how the story went together. You have a great talent in writing, can't wait to see what else you write.
this story was wonderful you have such talent as a writer I hope you continue writing these masterpieces
You should be writing for main stream publication. Well done. The level of sensitivity he shows for his sister is just amazing. Hope to see you some day on the New York Times best seller list. Under your real name.
The story line was great. The sex was just frosting on the cake,
I have to say that without a doubt this is the best story in Literotica and probably in the whole internet. Everything from the characters and the plot development was just excellent, I hope you keep writing these stories.
Highest rating for sure.
Wow is all I can say. This is truly a work of art. Even if the sex were taken out, this story itself is very compelling all its own. Once I started, I just HAD to finish it all in one go. It mixed mystery, betrayal, emotion, suspense, and humor beautifully.
The greatest hook had to be the feelings Clay was getting from the whole situation involving Isabelle and his sister, Ashley sharing the same body. The frustration, depression, and stress was wonderfully communicated, in my opinion!
Kudos on the "The Shining" reference - "I was really hoping she didn't go all 'The Shinning' on my ass." Absolutely hilarious! 5 stars easily!
I too read all the way through in one sitting. (very unusual for me) This could be mainstream like "fifty shades". I gave you five stars, maybe next time a little more graphic detail on the sex scenes would be nice.
This is by far the best story I have ever read on Literotica! This is actually worth 10 stars in my opinion! Usually I don't ever finish reading the long stories on here but I just couldn't walk away from this one. Great job! Keep up the good work!
This was a very good story. I enjoyed every aspect of it. Incest and Sci-Fi are my favorite stories to read on Literotica. The only complaints I have are that the sex wasn't as detailed as some and I feel the plot had a few small holes in it (Who murdered Isabelle? And why was she so suicidal one appearance then she wanted to cuddle with him?). Overall though it was a very good story 4/5
Most people get on this site looking for a quick story to get their rocks off, but you actually wrote something that is as fun to read the story as the sex scenes. I have only found a few stories on this site that I actually care enuff to write a comment after reading and this is so one of those stories. Keep up the good work and dont change anything about your writing style. Looking forward to reading what you come up with next.
I can't think of a better way to spend my time than to read a great story... One of the best------THANK YOU
I critique many stories. I am hard on many people because I write too. I think this story was just mildly erotic but it was so good I didn't care. One question. Why did Isabelle leave? Was it because their last meeting brought her up to the last part of her life? One other thing, you brought up the question of suicide or murder, bit never answered it. Continuation?
I think its great that this isn't just smut and was well written. Only problem was with the spirit changing from a jealous monster to an abused young woman, it didn't really add up.
Easily one of the most entertaining stories on this site. Please keep writing!
Itz The Best Story That I Ever read. .specially in This Site.......!!!!!!!
This was quite well-written and would be good, if taboo, even outside of the context of this site. My only question is... What about the camera they had set up in the attic? If I'm not mistaken it was never mentioned again.
This is a great story . The passion you write with draws you in to the story! You must keep writing like this !
Kudos on your writing skills!!! You should write mainstream stories....u were dat good!! The only thing i was wondering was how would you end the story....which was very aptly summarized by the last line...heh heh....Once again, Kudos!!!
I really couldn't stop reading. At first out of curiosity how this would work out. And then I was game for yout little thriller. I even saw that blockbuster unfold in my head.
The really cool thing is: I didn't enjoy it for its erotic value - which was there, too. I read it for the story. And I loved that!
Thank you for writing and sharing this!
Man, I didn't expect this much from an erotic story, its really a thriller. And a very good read for all type of readers. Thank you very much.! :-)
Is the brother retarded or something? Half way through the second page it's clear what's happening but he's either too stupid or a chickenshit little bitch and won't face it.
I didn't read anymore, so maybe that was answered later on.
A story so beautiful, thrilling and haunting. I literally could not stop thinking about what will happend next. Whenever I stop reading to read another story, it haunts me. ;)
Very unique. couldn't put it down til I finished it. WOW. Still thinking about it. Could be a movie....(without the naughty bits) :).
That's your only story?! Seriously? More....PLEASE.
So Im on page two and burning to comment before I read further. The brother not saying something to her in the attic when she started changing is totally unplausable, ...and no sister would freak out, pack up and leave just because he saw her in bra and panties or thought he was perving on her while she was changing in a room she knew he was in. Just not a believable plot sequence.
How can both of them, especially after the mirror incident, not think that the book is the reason since they both agree that she didnt go up there? And more importantly, what kind of loser brother wouldnt come out and tell here everything that had happened truthfully at this point?!
She wants to get the fuck out of the house NOW! A very sensible suggestion! (Though obviously doesnt fit the plot, hehehe) ...but retard seems to feel the need to convince her, RIGHT AFTER SHE TRIED TO KILL HERSELF, that its perfectly fucking safe! What. The. Fuck. ?!?
Only reason I can come up with is that in retrospect after calming down, he wants her to change again so he can fuck the shit out of the french maid, which will be double kinky since its his sister! No other reason! Any good, sane brother would pack their shit and run like hell!
"hey sis, you were possessed and tried to fuck me, then when I said no you tried to slit your wrists after you hit and scratched me for not putting out. Wanna stay here another night with me? I promise to fuck you proper if you change again, that way you'll be safe! I'll even ass fuck you, french girls like that, right?"
Rofl ;). This is gonna be fun to do a running commentary on ;)
This story is so great that if incest wasnt illegal, there should be a moviie about it
I especially liked the Isabella part, though brother sister part not so much.
And from the beginning when Isabella started showing feelings for her boss, I couldn't help but sympathize her. She was really good from her heart, she didn't deserve all that hurt, and even then held onto her love, even though it was clear that the guy was using her.
It's really sad that because of some such dogs women have to suffer, all because they can't keep their dick to themselves, and in doing so not only do they set a bad image for us all guys, but also they leave a lot of hurt, and the feeling of being used, to the women they betrayed.
This is a masterpiece. Not too long, but I did take almost 2 hours to read every word of it. Thank you! I love the struggle from Clay's side of the story. The way Isabelle and Ashley are essentially one person at the end is truly beautiful. The idea of brother/sister is a bit weird, but then again, that's what incest/taboo is for.
I realize this is incest/taboo fiction. But if you removed that aspect of it this would be a very good story for a magazine or anthology. It is moving, a little scary and sexy with 2 people using the same body. Well written and engaging. I couldn't even get up for a restroom break before having to finish it. Very much looking forward to your further writing--don't keep us waiting.
I beg you man women whoever you are kaizen4ever I loved your story greatly, so I beg you come back to literotica and write a sequel. Your truly - Anonymous
Thank you for sharing this with us, bye.
I have read many stories on this site, but none better written than this. Most of the time Literotica is a jack off place, but it is nice to encounter a high quality story with a good storyline along with a large degree of sensuality. Reading other comments I know I am not alone in this assessment. Please write more.
Typical tollywood horror story line with sibcest and erotica.
Btw nice story
I enjoyed the story picture. But what did the camera show? Did they ever review what was taken?