by Many Feathers
Once again, you've proven your mastery of this genre. Great build up, believable dialogue, and hot sex!
Don't wait too long on the sequel.
The reason I enjoy most of you fantastic body of work, is the slow build. This one seemed very rushed. I still like the characters a lot already, and am invested in their story, but I can't help but feel the 2 hours he visits is hardly enough to begin the full-on sex-capade. A slower build would have been a lot nicer. Still very erotic, and has your classic style dialogue, but it is just not enough for me. I hope for a quick sequel, but I want a lot more from the older-sis, little brother dynamic. Though, saying one of your stories isn't your best, is like saying one diamond isn't as valuable as the rest, its still a diamond!
Great story hope to see more soon..
with that said, I believe I've read this story before on another site.
not positive mind you but!!
Still it is an Excellent story....
Great story had my mind overflowing wishing it was me playing the brother!!! You have to finish the story with additional chapter(s).
great story you should continue it to explain what his sisters were talking about
total bullshit your story "A SISTERLY SURPRISE" is so stupid i couldn't even get past the first half page no guy that is a virgin would act like that when amy joined him in the shower he would have imediately left the bathroom and when she said he realy is a virgin he would have got up packed his stuff and told his sister that he hated her and left and never talked to her again try to keep your stories atleast sounding realistic
into to few pages--Slow down a bit
Too much in one story Better you have 2 or 3 parts and introduce each NEW adventure in a story. Still a HOTT story!
Like others have mentioned could have been extended, but an amazing read nonetheless. Has me begging for more. (pleading tone) SEQUEL PLEASE!
Oh, what a teenager's wet dream this story is!!! It has lots of HOT SEX in a completely unrealistic plot. No relationships are really involved -- just rampant genitalia. For what it is, it's well done.
Wow! RED HOT SEX -- pure joyous fun infused with true affection all the way! This gives a new definition to "homework" for diligent college men and women. I love it!
I really enjoyed this story and would love to see a sequel.
Another great story. Fuck the nay-sayers. I hope that there is a sequel soon.
More red hot, juicy, mix-and-match sex from one of my favorite authors! You might say that Many Feathers really tickles. Our hero manages to go from shy virgin to full-throttle threesome with his sisters. Now what goes when horny Mom shows up? Pray for the boy!
Great story. The characters are real. Would love to read more about them including the mother.
You have an incredible gift, and I thank you for sharing it with us.
Damn good story, loved it.
When r u going to publish ur other part of this story.
I'd love to read more.
YOU TEASE!!!! Now I'm all wet and looking for the other half of the story, when there is nothing to finish me off except my imagination, please don't tease. Let there be more??? Don't make me beg. BTW LOVED "Aunt SIOUX". The ending about spreading her ashes in Magic Falls was so touching, it made me cry. Keep writting.
MORE!!! well done!
wish I was Jared? two nice sisters he has, is he going to give his mum one as well? are all three girls going to gang bang him?
Please let there be more with of this story, I want to know the secret the girls haven't told!
Um I would like some more please lol! Wow what a fun story, and very sexy and I'm in agreement with the other comments what happens next inquiring minds want to know! I especially like the twist revelation of Amy being his step sister great story and it flows nicely just needs a conclusion!
All I can say is DITTO to everything everyone else said.......... (and daydream about being somewhere in that bed too)......
Really a great story..........
Wayne (aka Meltnmold)
Where the hell is the rest come on now. I have read it before so it is not new next please.Don't expect punctuation from me worst student in history.teachers thought I was the Anticrist.
How in the hell do you end a story like that.How about a little more.
You Cannot leave us like this! Its like getting someone just this side of orgasm and stopping saying, 'continued next week on Hard on the Edge and Tough on the Tush'. If you are going to start something, you should learn to finish it. I thought you were a good writer, but this has been on here in it's current and incomplete form for awhile now. You need to 'man-up' even if you've got other stories to write, you need to think of your readers.
I really love your stories but i would love that you would finnish them. I am quite curious who this Cassandra is and what this secret in the end is, c'mon! dont leave us hanging like this
That was totally hot! It was a well played out plot and the pacing was amazing. You didn't rush into the sex part and kept up a good build up. It was straight to the point at some instances but the pull the story had took care of it. Also love the ending as it opens up a lot of possibilities. It's a great cliffhanger and I can't wait to read the next part. Thanks for sharing!
I don't always vote or coment.... But when I do it's for a story like this! (In commercial of dude man)
Oh!!
Just as the story was building up it cut off. This is a good start for a multi-part series, but a cruel one-off.
Please continue the story of Jared, his sisters and mother.
Excellent build to a great reveal - so how about keeping these characters alive for us.
This is a wonderful story. Little things unfolding throughout at unexpected points. But, now, with Mom coming to visit and "Cassandra is going to love this", you've left me hanging. I can always use my own imagination here, to fill in the blanks, but thats not why I'm on this site. I'm here for YOUR imagination. You really need to bring this story to more of a close than a ' next week on MANYFEATHERS' and then no new episode. Like getting a tv show cancelled in the middle of the season.
..."He really is a virgin isn't he?" Once again Jared glared towards his sister, but this time he spoke.
"God damn it Charlene! How many people have you told anyway?" In spite of her brother's obvious discomfort and anger, she laughed.
"Just the one's that might be interested in helping you out with that if you're ever interested yourself! Now come on, lighten up Little Brother, or it really is going to be a long week!"
@@@ gawd that would have pissed me off! "No, its not gonna be a long week, you've had your fun and games, I'm out of here!" @@@
They spent the next couple of hours doing just that until Amy peeked her head in through the door. "Headed to bed, you going to be coming soon?"
"God...I hope so!" Char said easily. Jared assumed that his sister was tired.
@@@ how is this retard so dense that he didnt figure out that they're fucking in the first five minutes he was there? (Shaking head) @@@
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"Yep!" Amy interjected. "Your mother is now my stepmother," Amy confessed. "So you see Little Brother, in a way, we're sort of siblings ourselves now."
"Oh my god! You've got to be kidding me!" he said attempting to sit up. "You're my step-sister?"
"You might could say that," she said leaning over to kiss him, affectively disarming him momentarily before he had a chance to fully rise up. As she did, he felt the warm sweet lips of his sister's mouth once again engulfing him.
"You don't have a problem with that now do you Little Brother?" Amy teased momentarily breaking their kiss.
@@@ fucking both my sisters? Uh, no, no problem at all sis :) @@@
What happened to mom cunning ? Jared really needs to grudge fuck her in the ass ! Step mom too for that matter !
Need to add second chapter with Mom I know that's secret 5πππππ
This ASSHOLE is a skank scum of the earth LESBO story?????????? fuck you!
Seems to me you shouldn't flaunt your stupidity. The title and the tag makes it pretty clear what's going on; the surprise is that they let him in on it. And in a nicely written story, too.
Not sure you should flaunt your prejudices either, but you have a way of hanging them out there.
CA
Should make it where he becomes awesome at sex and the three women only want him
Please continue this story.
I'm sure there are more than a few of us that want more.
Please....
Amy turned out to be his sister to and brought the mother into it to fuckin gross
So mom is a cheating whore, sis is a lesbo. Why not bring a guy in to fuck bro up the ass?
Very good so far, now for the rest of the story? I'd like to see a few more episodes in this series PLEASE!!!
Which is a real shame, as that was really good.
Rapier
Stories like this should be continued by whoever is willing to do so
It Always seems my comments for the good stories All sound the same but here goes; This story was good but it is unfinished! What is the big family secret. I know the authors of stories on Lit don't get paid and maybe that is why No feeling of obligation to finish a Goid story. Or, maybe the author has other ideas for stories and wants to pursue those before the inspiration leaves them. Regardless, this is Frustrating. But this was a Good start. And it is Not Too late to continue it.
Not only is he naΓ―ve he is a real dumb shit. With responses like "Here? In this bed with the two of you?", "What secret?", "Enjoy what?"..... I guess that is the end since you haven't done anything with it in a number of years.
The siblings were always oh so open with each other, but it turns out sis has kept secret upon secret from her brother. So the description of their relationship is contradictory already. The concept of loving a person romantically while fucking around with numerous people is both illusionary and, to me, unappealing.
I've read many of your stories here and liked them. This one though is just badly written.
I'm normally constructive with my criticism but this one is one for the Recycle bin.
Keep writing though!
Weird story about how he found out , yet itβs not a very good story 2βοΈ