All Comments on 'A Special Weekend With Alexis'

I cant writ as you do but the parts I look for in storys is what color was her bush and what did she smell like between her legs.

That is the only part you left out of the story.

Please continue writing but make it dirtyer.

The story had a lovely and enveloping plot and the characters were well drawn, but the story seemed more like a procedural account than a story told by a passionate protagonist. Some of this may be from using too many passive verbs and being chary with your use of dialoge. As a result of this the female character felt flat.