All Comments on 'A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline Ch. 02'

And when Mr. Hardison is asleep. Jenna finds the broken glass and cuts his cock and balls off the dirty rapist.

Was Mr. Hardown abusing his authority by making her choose between bondage and being on the squad? Yes. But he did not force her to do anything that she did not want to do. It was either give him what he wanted or never cheer again. One of two choices, and she chose the first option.

The first "A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline" story makes it explicitly clear that she was already into him and willing to satisfy him sexually.

Also, I'm pretty sure that I made it clear that this was consensual.

The text:

Mr. Hardown walked over to the refrigerator and pulled out a pitcher of lemonade. He grabbed a glass and poured some lemonade into it. Unbeknownst to Jenna, the lemonade contained a special sleeping pill. He handed the glass over to Jenna. She prepared to drink it, but he placed his left hand in front of her mouth.

"Wait!" he yelled. "Are you sure that you want to remain on the squad?"

"Yes!" she exclaimed. "I've told you this several times already! I need to be a cheerleader!"

"Okay, then," he said. "You have been warned. Once you drink that, there is no turning back. Your discipline will begin, and you will not be free to go until the lesson is over. However, if you choose to leave now, you will willingly forfeit your position on the squad. Do you understand?"

"Look, Mr. Hardown, I love being a cheerleader," Jenna said. "It's my passion, and I will do whatever it takes to stay on this squad."

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"I told you, Jenna," he sneered. "This is discipline. If you want to stay on the squad and continue cheering, you will allow me to do this. But if this is too much for you to handle..."

"No!" she yelled. "I want to cheer! I need to cheer! I swear I'll do whatever it takes! I..."

"I know you will," he said. "Your willingness to do whatever it takes to stay on this squad is why I have brought you here. You see, I find you to be a very fascinating person, Jenna. Very slutty, but fascinating nonetheless. And I want to see how far we can go together. So let's begin."

The methods to get them to the point where they have sex are extreme (her consuming a drink with a sleeping pill and being taken to a BDSM styled basement while she is asleep), but I made sure to include that the main character warned her about drinking the lemonade and gave her the option to leave before and after she drank it. She willingly came to his house and (if you read the first "A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline") knew about his brand of "discipline" and what would happen.

I have no problem with receiving criticism or feedback regarding the quality of the story. However, I want to make it clear that the acts were consensual, and I do not promote rape or sexual assault in print or in real life.

Remember, this is a work of erotic fiction, and it should be viewed and interpreted as such.

I don't agree with wretched anon, but even your examples slant this as dubious consent due to the coercion. Hey, you wanna go do some bdsm stuff? Sure! That's consensual. Do this or you can't do this thing that is so very important to you is a bit smelly. You are certainly not alone in your interpretation of consent. So many stories rely on a level of blackmail. But it is not proper consent.

Those are all fair and valid points.

When I wrote this, I had to find a tone between Jenna expressing her willingness to have sex and Mr. Hardown having his way with her and doing as he pleased.

But yes, no matter how I interpret this, it's evident that this story involves blackmail,

coercion, and one person having significant and often unfair power over the other.

After reading the first comments on this story, I'm surprised the first chapter of "A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline" didn't get any comments suggesting that there was involuntary sex or rape since that story also involves blackmail and coercion.

Makes me wonder if the type of sexual behavior, the dominance in the act, and the place where the sexual acts occur give readers a different impression and perspective on whether there was consent or not.

Again, it's fiction so it's a good thing that the type of consent here is controversial in print only and not in real life.

Thanks for the feedback. I may write more BDSM stories in the future, and this feedback will definitely help.

This series really does deserve a nonconsensual tag, but that doesn't make it a bad series. Her enjoying the situation doesn't make it not rape (if that make sense). He blackmailed her, he drugged her, and there was no safe word.

Personally, I like stories that deal with blackmail, abduction, and rapey things like that because I'm just weird I guess, but I don't like it when stories confuse rape with consensual bdsm. It makes bdsm look bad, so just make sure you are clear about what is consensual and what is not when tagging and categorizing your stories.

When I wrote this erotic story, I intended for it to be a BDSM story.

Based on the feedback that I have received thus far, it's evident that it's a BDSM story in name only. I am aware that BDSM is intended to be consensual sex, though it definitely has its controversial aspects.

When I wrote this, I wanted to emphasize the power, dominance, and control that

Mr. Hardown had over Jenna. However, it seems that I forgot to include crucial aspects of BDSM, such as the safe word.

Unfortunately, it seems that a significant number of readers view it as a story that belongs in the nonconsensual/reluctance genre, which was not my intention.

I think what it ultimately comes down to is that ten pages of material isn't enough to properly tell a BDSM story and do it justice. There needed to be more buildup and development, and having one prior chapter was clearly not enough to fully establish what I wanted to be established in this series.

l will go back to writing BDSM at some point, but for now, I think I will either return to the point where I started or try out other genres.

Thanks for the feedback and constructive criticism.

Based on the feedback and the votes that this story has received so far, it's evident that this chapter was not as popular, well written, or arousing as the first chapter of this series. While this news is disappointing, it's essential for me to learn where I went wrong so that I can get back on track, improve my writing, and tell great stories. My main goals are to entertain and arouse my readers and have my work receive strong recognition/acclaim, and I will do whatever I need to do to achieve those goals. Unless there is a huge response or strong demand, this will more than likely be the final chapter of my "A Taste of Cheerleader Discipline" series. I will continue to write and submit erotic stories, but they will have no direct connection to this series. Thanks again for reading, voting, and/or providing me with feedback.

First cent: another example that supports nonconsent is the principal destroying the cheerleader's panties resulting in her being publicly humiliated. Second cent: details are important -- cheerleader's top cannot be removed with handcuffs in place.

Thank you for the feedback and constructive criticism.

It's been nearly two years since I wrote this story, but you do bring up some valid points there.

Regarding the first cent: this story (and the 1st chapter of this series) was definitely a learning experience for me as a writer. This series probably should have gone under the nonconsent/reluctance genre from the beginning, and it should have been written as such. It went the direction that it ended up going in, readers voiced their skepticism, and I learned from it and improved as a writer.

Regarding the second cent: I haven't read this story in a while, but feedback like yours definitely served as a reminder that I needed to do a better job rereading and editing my stories before I publish them on Literotica.

Thanks again for the constructive criticism. I do appreciate it.