All Comments on 'A Traditional Swim Ch. 02'

Would like to see you 2 story lines converge into one story and then split back into the two, coming together and then apart as would be natural. Also, if Sally and Sarah would join Harry in a ménage maybe with Mindy from the Y added in to make it a 3 on 1 orgy that would be hot.

Would like very much to see these characters continue on, seperately and as a group. Very well written story.

Why would anyone want to do this for free? If it were me, I would insist the equivalent amount be donated to a specific charity. That would have been more incentive...but to do it for free for these young, rich people, come on!!!! So I rate story lower for this oversight and lack of motivation.

Would have been great to keep Sally single and as an oncor had her join in as a threesome. Hopefully that will come soon, but in Public would have been Fun!

I wish I could do what they did.

Please somebody give me the opportunity!

As hot as it is, I have hard times to suspend my disbelief for some reason I can't really put my finger on. That said, I enjoy even ridiculously fantastic stories all around here... just something about the event feels underdeveloped in some way. Maybe I'm just more prude than I believe myself to be, heh. I will give a five anyways.

I've often thought that the world would be much different if we were allowed to go nude in public. I don't subscribe to CFNM stories, but you took it away from that to tell a better story.

A hot tale, but fucking in front of a select dinner crowd has been done before. The story read well and I don't have any constructive ideas to offer. Four star score and I like the characters and want more.

I loved it, I haven't read anything similar before, perhaps some could be recommended, catherine.32@yahoo.com. perhaps my only complaint, it left me wanting more, perhaps a ffm threesome with Sally. I gave it 5 stars, I don't think these authors get the recognition that their efforts deserve. Everyone should think about how much pleasure that they give to so many.

Liked the story but think seeing Sally being fucked by well hung Eric would have been more erotic. Watching an average completely shaved sissy looking older man fucking a gorgeous women young enough to be his daughter just isn’t a very erotic visual.

Well as they say "go big or go home", and a live sex show certainly qualifies as big. Another great chapter in a well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. As this is my first foray into your writing and the first story you posted here I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.