by DeeFisher
thanks vmp! I admit I am a comment whore, I love feedback on my writing - especially positive of course but creative criticism is accepted too x
great story, well written, very descriptive and HOTT! I too am a feedback whore and crave comments from readers of my stories, and you thoroughly earned this one my friend! I am already waiting for the next segment in this saga. keep up the good work!
made me eager to see what happens next--and your profile taught me a word--tittivate--which I plan to try to use as often as I can, since it has a nice ring.
Thank you for sharing this fascinating story, and I look forward to wherever it's going.
Very well written. Too often stories on this site have no build up. This story was well developed. Like the others, I look forward to the next chapters. Well done.
I love how this story feels real emotionally despite the over the top fantasy elements
Absolute tosh ... and even the picture in her profile is a fake. The story was ripped off another submissions site.
Story is great! Very sexy. One piece of constructive criticism is that it is "intents and purposes" not "intensive purposes". It was a bit jarring although the story itself is very good.