by Draggonfli
the situation is totally hot, but you seemed to be in too big a hurry. i'm all for getting down to the action, but it seemed all jumbled and erratic. slow it down. nothing wrong with a few adjectives and adverbs. overall, kinda disappointing, but really didn't miss by much.
I really enjoyed reading your story. I absolutely love readin and writing about male bisexual incest. Keep up the good work!
Very Hot, we have similar writing styles, you might enjoy my story "The Pool Party"
This is a good story. I enjoyed reading it. Some scenes were especially hot.