All Comments on 'A Xmas Party Gone Bad.'

This is pathetic on every level. Minus 5 stars.

Excellent BTB, Loved why more than the ass holes below, that wouldn't know a well written story if it smacked

them up side the face, hahahahaha! 5 BIG FAT TWINKLING STARS! and as big, a Thank You!

Dumb, just plain dumb

Your writing style is choppy, it lacks flow, you got some work ahead of you or LW will eat you alive.... LW is all about BTB and arm-chair-guru's.

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I liked your first attempt but you need to read it OUT-LOUD, make edits and read ALOUD again - you will soon see your errors and flow issues.

It had potential. Agree with the other posters. Needs a re-write.

Ending needed work.

Load of crap.Also is English the author's first language?

Badly done. Very badly done.