All Comments on 'Abbey Loves Cock & Pussy'

These should be stories...not novels.

Way too long needs to be shorter

Despite the length,I read the whole thing and enjoyed it.

What a great story. I hope you plan on adding more to it:) Loved all aspects of the story. Well told.

Great story! Don't worry about the length, a lot of us like the journey which a longer story can take us.

Hi. Just read your story - it had some minor flaws, but a lot of potential. Will be reading the 2nd one soon. I will also be sending you a private message, so good luck!

Ignore the 'Too Long' comments from people who don't even want to give their names. Many of the great authors on this site write chapters at least this long.

If you wouldn't mind, I would like to make one criticism about your writing style that I hope you find constructive. While you had a good story theme and developed it well - the way you wrote seemed a little cold, dispassionate and lacking in emotion. It is difficult to put my finger on exactly why but it felt a bit like being told about it at arms length rather than being involved in the emotions and feelings of the story. Maybe the language was more formal that you would normally use in speech? Maybe it was the use of many short, staccato sentences? It just didn't quite flow despite it being a good story.

Sorry, but you lost me when Jerry and David raped Abbey at the end of page 1. Rape is never erotic or sexy and should never be encouraged or condoned.