by mutterguffin1
The reason I put in comments was because the story is a script for the two characters to read and to que them to make sound effects when prompted. It is going to be recorded for an audio CD.
... you sorta broke my train of thought every time there was a parethetical 'sound' like "...single grunt, brother moans in XTC, etc, etc!" Other than that, it was very good. The idea that you had a brother & sister do it was very good also.