All Comments on 'Adjusting To Normal Ch. 01'

I still think she was to quick to jump into be with Michael.I mean she only just met the guy a while back. I look forward to seeing where this story goes.

Your first page is a copy from tv series which doesn't gel with fiction writing.

The sex is totally unexplained, non-erotic and threw the story into limbo.

You have the makings of a great story here but you sacrifice plot development and character interreaction for 'wham, bam' dialogue/narrative and little character development.

A tad too egotistical for me.

It's mysterious and exciting. Good start,can't wait to see where you take take on this new journey.

Happy to see a new story from you.

but this story has definite promise. A mystery that anticipates a plot much more intriguing than just a straight sex story, has much to endear itself to me. Ok, so the sex element is out of the bag, as it were, but Michael seems more than up for the job!! I'm happy!

I only hope now that Michael isn't the culprit (although by the 'laws of Literotica', this is now unlikely....baddies don't generally give really good sex; they aren't sensitive to their partner; and they are not the vision of her private fantasy!)

So basically am eager for the next chapter. What happens to Eliza and Michael in this one?

I love the story and want you to continue. I thought it was very erotic. Don't listen to the nay sayers. I thoroughly enjoyed your previous story and I think I'll like this one as well. Keep up the good work!

I loved this story and can't wait for the next chapter!!

I didn't know if I would like this story as it is so different from the vampire series. I'm interested in seeing where you take it. Do love a good mystery.

three brothers. i hope sometime in their past they have diff mothers because three brothers with each having a diff color of eyes don't really work genetic wise.

jonathan has blue eyes; thomas dark green and michael has brown eyes. i silly detail i know, but i like a bit of consistency when it comes to siblings ;)

I like the murder mystery idea can't wait to see what you do with it. I enjoyed New Kingdom so much and if that's any indication of what you have in store for us, I'm sure you'll keep us on our toes and biting our nails.

story and am already hooked. I don't have time to leave long comment because chapters 2 and 3 have already posted and I want to catch up quickly. Again, already hooked!!!!!!!