All Comments on 'Adventures of Hollywood Jim Ch. 65'

Very nice, you went for romantic instead of overly sexual and it worked out very well. Always good to see this series.

I love Kate, and you did it right to tit fuck her, and it was amazing, loved all your dialogue. You simply can't write about Kate Upton without the tit fuck!

Very sexual, loved all the dialogue and yes great blow job and titty fuck

You totally need to revisit Kate again in the future!

Count me in, would love to see you revisit her.

Should be a hot one, but so many mistakes.

1] How does the guy at the start know about the next job looking at things from the past jobs while Jim is checking his own E-mails?!

2] So much mention & description of the hotel, but then they leave to go to the party at a place neither named nor described?!

3] MANY missing-or-wrong punctuation, etc.!

4] Skipped to final page to leave comment, & top defies the way people would act or speak!!!

Not much build up to the storyline, Jim's quick into sex, you dont need to have sex every chapter.

He needs a std checkout.

He keeps coming g in them, surely there's 1 or 2 get pregnant.