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Wish you'd learn proper writing style and get over your over emphasis of race, orientation, religion and county of origin. I swear you must spin various 'wheels of fortune' one race, one religion, one economically depressed countries, then use the results to identify your characters! Learn to write sentences that don't cover multiple topics, times, and subjects. Write dialog instead of narrative style. See if you can write a story without identifying skin color, religion, or country of origin. People are people, your over identifying things about your characters doesn't make them act any different than anyone else, saying that a person is muslim or black or Haitian doesn't give any insight to behavior or action. GET OVER IT.

Snek thinks that your writing needs to be improved. Snek thinks that dialouge was awful. Snek thinks you need lessons in Grammer.

Love,

Snek