All Comments on 'After~Dark'

This story was a great read. I really hope to see more. As far as grammar and spelling goes I've seen far worse on here. In fact the only spelling error I can remember was collage instead of college. Keep up the good work. Hope to see more.

Page 2 was very hard to follow. I couldn't tell who the narrator was, so I got lost in the half sentences and couldn't find my interest pulled back into the story.

It started out in a good way and I was hoping to finish. Alas and alack; I dropped out. Good luck with your story.

I loved this. Best story I've read on here. Please add more!

Got turned off in the first few lines by hobbel .. it’s hovel by the way. If you can’t bother googling a word you shouldn’t write. Anyway I finished your convoluted mess. Because I try to give everyone the benefit of the doubt but… no. You have a few ok parts but no.