All Comments on 'Alice and James Ch. 01'
by shadereturn
- 9 Comments
Anonymousover 15 years agobut, sure could use an editor. the spelling and gramatical errors made it very hard to read.
epiphany65over 15 years agoIt's sad to see a good story hampered by mistakes. Find an editor to help you with your next submission.
oldwayneover 15 years agomight help, but it is still a good tale. I look forward to reading more installments.
klaxxover 15 years agoThere were errors? This story was soooo hot that I didn't even notice them! Fabulous writing! MORE!
Anonymousalmost 15 years agojust another wannabe writer that can't finish what they start i wish this site would delete unfinished stories after a year or so then ban the writer from ever posting again
Anonymousover 9 years agoan unfinished story is worse than no story at all this needs to be deleted.
Anonymousabout 2 years agoD cup tits with no sag???????"
Even C cups, and some B cups sag. If those D cups didn't sag, they would be harder, and feel like granite rocks.
