All Comments on 'Alicia's New Position'

I always enjoy your hot sexy stories, but I also usually have the same concerns and complaints.....i just really hate the way the husbands get shafted in your stories. For the most part you don't portray then as wimps and that I appreciate, but you pretty much always screw them over-they do all then can to make a family and home, and your main character ends up trashing them and the home. Honest, I do understand the focus of your stories are the white wife and the black stud, but geeze, do you have to trash a hard working loving ( if unconscious) husband to make your story work?

Thanks, Gary

very well done as usual , so hot i loved and staYED turn on the entire story

i loved it so hot with her goin crazy ovre black cock, lets not have the baby yet, abortion, bc pills and have wild black fun

always like this author, keeps it hot and wild, and she did have a new position ( on a big black cock) lol, still i enjoyed it and was greatly turned on, i agree lets not hav a baby this first night, just enjoy the hot hot black sex , soooooooooo good

Sorry, total lack of any appeal as a story of any kind.

Thanks for giving me the type of story I like best. I only wish my wife were more like Ali.

In our case she wouldn't have to sneak around to enjoy herself with other men. It would turn me on to encourage and know that she had become a black cock slut.

I give this story a two-load rating. Most stories I read don't get even one load.

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I read and I read and I read, this particular story, which I throughly appreciated, I was hoping as I was reading there would be a bit more public situations, perhaps compromising situations at work, as Alicia showed her appreciation of Ronnie's work ,, ,,, however I was not altogether disappointed with the out come ......

I do hope you intend to provide similar stories along these lines, I would very much like to read others

mr unknown i am not kathy

this prob fag keeps sending secret e mail i am sure u get them, why does he read this unless he gets off on it, sayin we ugly fat have nigger baby , must be decribing his wife maybe she left him for a bbc

do not take it out on just because we like bbc also

maybe we ought to get togethre on email send a pic and hav it cropped to show him all of us and see how ugly we r . lol

u do not get good lookin blk guy to \see you unless u can a ttract them just like white guys

what a looser

First of all, I need to state I have nothing against the genre. Interracial stories can be very arousing if done well.

However, there are a number of problems with this text, ranging from the characters to the language. Your main-character ‘Ali’ starts out good. She has problems with her husband – he leaves her alone and lonely a lot and he’s infertile but she loves him and wants to stay faithful. She fights the temptation that Ronnie is before she finally succumbs. I like that, it’s believable. However, that she goes from having sex with one (black) guy to fuck everyone in sight in the span of a couple of hours is not. If you want to bring her down to her true level (what was it? A cum dumpster for blacks) you need to do it gradually.

She goes from horny to crying awfully fast, and you don’t take advantage of the first-person view. More internal debate and rationalization would be good. Suddenly having her cry doesn’t quite cut it…

‘Ronnie’ is literotica’s stereotypical black guy (like Ali is the white housewife) who wants the woman and wants to share her with as many as possible. Nothing wrong there, stereotypes work.

Your use of the language is not the best either, I’m sorry to say. At least nine out of ten of your sentences start with the subject – which is fine if you’re in middle school but it gets boring very quickly. You’re listing a number of statements, you’re not telling a story. This is hard to correct, I realize that but I feel you should be mindful of it the next time you write a story.

You use direct speech a lot which is good. I myself tend to underuse it which annoys me. However, if you use it too much, you should mix in descriptions of the characters and their actions (what’s she feeling when he says that, how does he reaction to say this, e.g.). It’ll give the readers a better understanding of what’s going on. Your sex-talk could also use some work… Adding extra k’s to the word ‘black’ just makes it annoying to read (as a rule of thumb, when one draws out of a word, one uses the vowels: blaaack). Try describing how she feels and acts instead of throwing extra letters on your words (and… well, please find a more sexy word for the vagina than ‘snail’. It really doesn’t work).

Also, why did she get a tattoo? To show him she’s his, I assume, but I don’t know because I don’t know what it says. That’s a major blunder, actually, and the whole tattoo-scene felt very rushed to me. More descriptions (and admittedly, I’ve ever only gotten my ear-lobe pierced but I refuse to believe she ‘didn’t feel a thing’ when she gets a hole through a very intimate, very blood-filled, very nerve-filled part of her body) and not just conversation.

On a final note, a lot of the readers don’t like it when the first chapter gets too long. I did like you did with my first story, so I can easily put myself in your spot. But 3-4 literotica-pages are the optimal size, in my humble opinion.

That being said, I hope you can use at least some of my critique in your next chapter. Mix up your sentences a bit and use more descriptions, and you should be good. You obvious likes to write, so I hope you’ll continue.

DontJudgeMe.

This bitch, Alicia, is one awesome black cock slut. I love it!

On the behalf of the positive "anonymous" people that are your fans and 1000% support you...I say keep on fighting the negative "anonymous critics" by posting Chapter 10, 11, 12, and so on!!! Pump those new stories out fast like a black cock filling a white fertile pussy!!! I love your Alicia series and Prisoner series and how the two series have different takes on interracial sex!!! I will also say that I'm pleased to see Alicia with a smile on her face at the end of Chapter 9...I hope she's beginning to accept her lifestyle and through embracing it her new stories will be filled with new adventures for her and those she turns into black cock sluts!!! :-D

I read the first three pages then realised that it wasn't going anywhere after that. If you want to seduce a lady though, the first thing that you have to do is kiss her, you don't blackmail her into touching your cock. I realise that the author may be trying a different approach, but it's unconvincing

Very, very repetitive.

Pleasing to hear about the forces finest standing to attention and helping a damsel in dire need. Check your pistols n keep those night sticks at the ready, and always beware of a premature weapons release..... back on patrol

Ok, overall, its like many of your stories. Pretty decent writing overall, stereotypical in every way for the whole black guy/white housewife motif. It devolved really fast though, less than a week and she's a cock hungry slut...not really believable even for fiction. Plus the whole 12 weeks pregnant and she couldn't get an abortion? Granted it might be the way you want it for you story, but a little realism is never a bad thing.

Good Story and so True. There was that One Black Man a long time ago for me that I just couldnt say NO to and let Do What ever he wanted to me or Had me DO for him or some Other Man if he chose to Give or Share me with. He was my Everything and I gave to him Anywhere and Anytime He WANTED me or wanted me to Do Something or Some One. He became more then just my Lover, He became my BIG Black Daddy, my Dom and Master, my Pimp after a while even. I just wanted to make him Happy and FEEL GOOD and wanted to PLEASE him in EVERY WAY. There wasnt nothing I wouldnt Do to PLEASE Him or to FEEL Him INSIDE me or Who like Ever he wanted to see me with or gave or sent me to please or dropped me off to spend time with when I feeled he was more Pimp Daddy and liking being Over me like that. Again I just couldnt say No to anything he wanted me to do or when he wasnt around I just had that Empty Feeling like Alicia so I know how that Itch goes and NEED to FEEL a LOVER like him IN me. I going to read the rest and see how much more is like me what you write that Alicia do. I'm just feeling what you write so far.

I love that story. Well written and!