All Comments on 'Ali's Art Ch. 11'

Damn you! Now I have to wait another day, and probably another. You rascal!

You have an unbelievable writing talent that lets me feel the emotion, the ever closer sway of these two toward the inevitable. Thank you for sharing this story.

he needs a smack upside the head.. even his mom sees it

I can't wait for the next chapter. You need to proof read before submitting. There was a break in continuity in the B&B: one moment they are in the tub, the next sentence they are on the bed.

I'll have to put some of those little way lines in ~~~

There's a break on the copy I submitted between those two sentences that didn't make it to the version here.

The teasing is probably one of the things that makes me want to keep reading more and more. It's kind of like seeing a woman in a very sexy outfit. Leaves something to the imagination and creates intrigue. The build up is so much more amazing than just allowing them to give in all at once. Great job!

WOW !

That wasn't just hot, it was sizzling !