All Comments on 'All These Years'

I will never cheat. I would die if I hurt my wife like that.

What is the point of this nothing story?

I don't get in this story the point of bringing a marriage to a submmation by one event to only end it there without the interactions of guilt and shame, innocents and if you choose redemption?

In one short story you can see the template of their whole life together. They were existing, but there was no real life there. It was like the basics of a meal, enough to nourish you, but with no flavor, no spices, nothing to make the meal interesting.

I have seen this exact situation in a family member. She married a loser who barely brought home enough of an income, had average brains and no intelligence. She worked too and did all the housework and raised their 4 kids. He thought being a man and having a penis somehow made him head of the household. To warrant being a "man" and getting the respect of the household then you have to be the MAN. Means you have to be able to do at least the manly duties like being the provider, being a good leader, being intelligent and someone the rest of the household can look up to. Well, he wasn't, and as soon as the children, that SHE raised along with working full time and keeping house, left the house to college she wanted to be with other men. With interesting, intelligent and educated men. For her children she sacrificed many of her prime years.

In this case, the husband seems a neanderthal of a man. He says in his youth he loved to fight just for the heck of fighting. He obviously not someone who listened to her or understood her in any way. He added no spice to their lives, as he didn't get it, that she wanted a trip. Something different. A change of pace, something different to do. He was ok with the same monotony because he had limited intellect. She was probably no genius, but my bet would be she was more intelligent than him and needed some change to challenge her mind. It sucks because she probably loved him and because of the kids is trapped to be with him.

Nice ending I thought!...I think?

Who the hell cares!

Good story.

ending a stillborn marriage. Nice try, but she cheated. She CHEATED! She wanted, she yearned, she needed, but she never said a fucking thing about it, until she got caught, cheating.

Do you know who you cheat? You cheat people you don't know, or don't care about. When you cheat strangers its wrong. When you cheat friends its a sin. When you cheat on your spouse its a cruelty. Do you know who you treat with cruelty? People who mean nothing to you. It was nothing, she said. Probably one of the few honest comments she has made to him in months, years. It was nothing because her vows are nothing because their relationship had become nothing because He, became Nothing, to her.

Do you know why you cheat? You cheat because getting what you want is more important than integrity, self respect, or common human decency. You cheat because you are selfish, and lazy. And you think you can get away with it. Probably because you have before.

They can stay in the same house, they can decide to not get divorced, they can start fucking and acting out in other ways that mimic what they used to do, when they were married, partners, friends, lovers. But she has destroyed their relationship. "They" are no more.

You left us with a piquant illustration of the symptoms, but a paltry, silly, notion of the disease. Lots of emotion, but no intelligence. Useless.

Thanks for trying. Congratulations on your commercial success. Smart, staying away from Loving Wives. No sense in writing what you know so little about.

This story makes me feel things. No punches pulled, just good writing, great storytelling. I was more interested in your How Tos this was my chance to see what you can do with an actual story. I won't ever read it again, but if I ever come across it again, I'll remember it. It made me feel things.

Why print this nothing story,Literotica can't be that hard up?

Wrong wrong wrong! The only thing that is right is the timer on the stove

Speaking of time" Mickey Mouse Club" closing song Now it's time to say goodbye to all our family! Good luck y'all ★★☆ WOOF!

What a stupid question to ask?What are we going to do know?.No brainer he dumps her.Also a nothing of a story,why publish it.?

I can't see how anyone gives this more than one star.

You catch her in bed.

You let the guy walk out.

You let her blame you.

You let her hug you as you forgive her? She is still nak3d and wet from him.

Fuck no.

Earlier you talk about how cold she is and you too as your testicles tighten.

I disagree. You obviously lack balls, testosterone nor any sense of manhood.

You have more talent than most on this site.

As a child, I looked at my parents' daily routine. Mom cleaning the house and singing to me. Baking cakes and cookies. Seeing to it that our clothes were washed, dried, folded or hung in the closet. Mom loved working in her flower garden. Dad would come home and playfully kiss Mom and tell her that he loved her. He said it differently each time, but even as young as I was, I knew he was expressing his love for Mom. I remember looking forward to the day when my future wife and I slipped into such a wonderful routine. Then I started hearing from my wife how friends of ours had divorced because their marriages had become routine and boring. And the next thing I knew I was being served with a divorce. When my wife finally answered my question, "Why?", she said, " Like so many of our friends, our marriage became all routine." Now, I live in a shoebox apartment, making payments on the house that once was mine, paying child support on a son that calls another man, "Daddy", paying alimony, paying off her car and insurance. So, another man is having sex with her at no cost to him. They don't talk about marriage. Neither want the routine of marriage. I have not even dated since I was served. There is not a woman on earth I trust with my heart now.

It may be the opening, the middle, or the close of a story.

You might try writing a "story" where this is the opening, middle or close - or one of each. Now there's a challenge.

You have a demonstrably vivid imagination and writing skills.

Go on; give it a try.

Should never have been published.

A writer who generates the volume of comments as are chronicled here knows he has produced something special. Love it or hate it, it has moved so many people to acknowledge it one way or the other. This is an A+ story, worthy of 5 stars. I must check you out.

EVEN MORE CRAP

Half a page story generates 250 comments and quite the debate.

Indicative of superb writing though lots of differing interpretations ensued.

Husband had bad past history-terrible in fact-but he changed. Aged from hard work last thing he would want to do on vacation is drive cross country to crowded tourist trap. Housewife is at home most of time last thing she wants to do is stay home.

Lover's parting remark indicates relationship has become close over long period of time. I figured this was first time they had sex, but he was expecting an upcoming divorce.

Wife timed sex session for husband to see.

The scene earlier was suit sitting in kitchen while she made family meal!

Hey where were kids...lover and husband were polar opposites meaning wife telling husband he was no longer her type. Other than nice rack...am fairly certaing she had changed over years herself.

Real world seeing wife in bed with guy when you arrive home close to regular time and neither lover nor wife seem all that concerned leaves little chance for much of marriage going forward...certainly crap she has intentionally been feeding him is burnt to crisp.

Hey she wants out go for it but have some class. She is unhappy try to get him into marriage counseling. He won't go then file.

But what she did was intentionally cruel and destructive.

Oh but let us not forget

HUSBAND IS ONLY ONE THAT MATTERS

Just plain stupid.

But unsatisfying. Felt unfinished but nice work.

i don't know who I am? newsflash you're a gutless selfabsorbed soon to be divorced whore. was anything said to hubby, if not out on her ass she goes. 1

Cut the cheating cunt loose, or kill them both.

The man in the suit lay dead. The cheating wife lay dead. Husband disappears.

Pathetic! Pussy-wipped!

She's using the old "I don't know who I am any more" excuse? HE'S supposed to do HIS duty, be the good worker drone to support his family, but it's too much to ask her to do HER part?

And what's with her smile and "I know" when he says he hates what she's been cooking? Is she deliberately cooking meals that she knows he doesn't like? Talk about passive-aggressive!

What more can I say? For now *1* unless you "Finish the damn story!"

Good start but undone. We all think we know what we would do but until you walk in his shoes - do you really?

Although it's not for me to apologise, as I do, for other people's crass, insensitive comments, I can somewhat understand people feeling like that if they have known and felt such pain, and not dealt with it..... So many people will never be able to get over or come to terms with it. I can understand that.

When a man and wife have been 'in love' and truly loved each other for decades, and a thing like this 'happens', it can be, is, absolutely devastating. It's only a story I know... but very well written, and it exposes the anger, frustration, hurt, sense of loss and bewilderment that people inevitably feel.

After that unfinished drivel, won't be reading any more of this crap. No consequences for the fucker or fuckee, WTF. Absolute drivel.

just another unfinished story-- 1 star

He is still in shock. When that wears off, he needs to throw her out. This crap about losing herself, and him not being there for her. Blah, blah, blah. He works hard to give his family a better life. She takes the money and uses it to meet men at these stupid classes. She is one of the worst cheating wives portrayed on this site. Snap out of it and show her the door

I have fallen from 30 feet. It is a miracle that I suffered only a few broken bones and a punctured lung. I have survived being stabbed numerous times. I have even been shot in the palm of my left hand. But none of these injures come close to the pain I felt when I came home three days early from the military and found my wife in bed underneath a total stranger. Just thinking about it brings the pain back, and that was several years ago. I would not presume to tell the husband how he should have handled it. As for me, it should have been a natural reaction. After all, I had the training. I should have killed them both. I still don't know why I didn't.

I'm sorry if you are going through this, nut I have been here. Didn't get back with my ex and didn't catch him in bed exactly but I've been here. I now have a love that is more than the one that felt like it killed me, this one has my soul and I love what you did with this song! I've heard it and it made me cry for what might have been. Please keep writing!!

What the fuck!

A wife instead of talking to her husband, instead of working on their marriage, decides for a year to have a premeditated, year of lying, disrespect, dishonour betrayal.

A cheating cunt with no remorse.. even when "explaining" why, treats him with contempt, that he should be keeping up better.

Then a pussy wimp of a husband just saying oh well.. life goes on, or some such bullshite

What a fucking cunt and a prat IT is married to.

At least this piece of crap was very short.

She-it man! I read this shite hoping to B.T.B. Hell nothing, nada, zip, fuck all. Fuck this story?

I guess the idea is wife can seek out lover bring him into marital bed knowing husband will be coming home and find her.

He did not arrive that early as indicated by kitchen alarm going off signaling his usual arrival time

Story lacking something

I was looking for a story not a paragraph wasted my time shim sorry but could have been longer

now that hit me right where it hurts the most, an I love it, thank u so much it means a lot to me, now I want... no... I need what Jim an Molly have all of it, the good, sad, bad an mad times of it, only I am unable to do so, even worse don't know how, but I would allow my Goddess to have as many lovers as she wishes, as long as I can play with both them too. Rated A HEART WARMING 5 Stars

Absolute rubbish, grammar was good, does that count? Nope didn't think so. There is reconciliation and then there is RAAC. But this one didn't even do that. I'm sorry but no rating from me on this one...

The wife didn't act responsibility and he needs to move on. Kick her to the curb, it does not make any difference why she did it. She stepped over the line.

The best and simplest is to leave her and divorce the skank in the fastest time possible,killing,beating up is just good to end up in jail and let the shit last longer

I guess different people react differently. Some can stand to eat shit and others cannot. When a man finds out his wife does not love him, and by definition a cheating wife does not love her husband, there is nothing left except his own self respect, and that must be preserved at all costs. If he does not stay loyal to himself when no one else is, then he has betrayed himself! What is left for such a man? No one loves him enough to care about his well being, not even himself. That man is one step away from suicide. So, rise up, and fight. Attack and beat the shit out of both of them. Then make sure she knows that the next move is up to her. She can tell the police what happened, or she can tell the police that her husband caught the other man beating and raping her and he interceded. Their future is her choice. After he spends a year or so in jail, they will be bankrupt and in the poorhouse.

Cheating cunt got away with it.

no rating

THERE IS NO EXCUSE FOR WHAT SHE DID!!! It might have helped if she DEMANDED to be heard if the dumb assed hubby wasn't listening. If he still didn't listen then divorce his ASS. NOW SHE IS ONLY A SKANK SLUT. she deserves the street naked with ABSOLUTELY NOTHING!

I appreciate the author trying to write that both people play a part in a relationship good or bad it always takes two, blame is shared as well as praise. I think the reactions of the couple were not based in reality. The deeper the love the stronger the reaction that's just a plain fact. Believe me the last thing you want to do to the woman you have loved for many years is touch her in any way if you saw what he saw and the absence of reaction from her tells us she didn't love him any more, hell the fact she is in her marital bed with another man screams just that fact! In the beginning the author States that the background doesn't matter but it does if they met and married quickly I would expect this scene later in life. Marriage isn't respected anymore most end in divorce because the couple fall for the burning hot flames of new love but, lol there's always a but, it is when those flames burn out and grow cold that will tell if 20 yrs later you will make it. The old Celtic saying is something like:Long after the burning flames of new love turn to embers may you find you have married your best friend. great saying if I do say so my self. All relationships start great but in a 20 yr relationship you have to work at keeping the fires going and it can't compete with the excitement of a new one. I'm rambling sorry I enjoyed this story it was very well written I just think it was lacking a little in realistic reactions from both who claim to love each other. Sleeping with another in your marital bed is never the correct action in any situation. And if you are having identity issues choosing to become a cheating spouse doesn't seem like an intelligent choice to find yourself. lol thanx for the read!

You did great in expressing the emotions. You took us high, then low. We went to the precipice, we looked up, the down. Then you left us there. This was a great set up, but not a story.

KICK THE SLUT OUT!!!

... is, I think, the point of 'ART" Is it not?

I have been thinking of a story very much like this for quite a while... perhaps I'd read this years ago and forgot?

This story IS that emotional/spiritual/physical response, by the characters, which defines 'drama' man v man, man v himself, etc.

The ability to show this struggle in the manner that this was done is great! I want MORE though.... this should have been much longer. NOT to give any MORE of the timeline necessarily, but to explore more of the feelings each of the characters as they deal with their failures, and the failure of their spouse.

Great job!

Can't think why I missed it in the first place.

It tells a powerful story in a plausible and believable way.

You drove off the road...and you got stuck in the muddy ditch.?.?.? ● RIGHT ●

First damn story too ! ! ! I'll try one more story but I'm scared. I don't want any of your nuttiness to rub off on me.......bill

Lol, sry.....1 for shock value

Damn good start ! ! ●THOUGH●

He knew he failed her.

She knew she failed him.

So sad.

Beautifully written.

SK. You should not care for mr. Anon's comment, just another insecure oversensitive guy.

After reading your piece on how to appreciate a man, I started reading this with anticipation. Sadly, this story casts a huge shadow over both. Your heart is empty, and you missed the point.

no pun intended this is pure shit

3 but it really should be a 2.

This story is like the little boy who shot the arrow in the air and it landed he knew not where. What's the point? He's a wimp and she's the 'modern' bitch, only being complete once she Fuck's another guy. Then what?

As you left it, who really cares? They don't.

On second thought, 2 would have been better.

Your account of a betrayal throwing a couple out of their comfort zone and clinging to their time worn environment was well done. A snapshot does not tell the story of what the water quality in the fishbowl will entail going forward. A person once said, " trust is something cautiously given, takes a second to destroy and a lifetime to rebuild if at all", I see what you were going for in this snapshot and found it thought provoking and well written yet miles away from the closure we all come to expect from a story. In my humble opinion, that is what made this story interesting.

You have a skewed definition of "love". Putrid and foul is all I can say. Get some counseling

I thought your twenty tips for a good editor was excellent so I read this. i have to say I found this disjointed and difficult to read.

It is well written and thought provoking.

You say that love just doesn't disappear. It sure as shit wasnt there when she fucked another man in the marital bed. Love can happen at first sight. To me, it can disappear at first sight also. You can follow that asshole right out the door slut.

Not sure if people realize but your supposed to read this AFTER hearing the song then kinda merge the two together into a mental montage.

Slow clap. It really was beautiful, expect at the end saying it was us which gives a direction that he forgave her. Would have been better if it was a fork in the road.

5 stars.

pussy I ever read about and she was just another stupid cunt. Formulaic and inane. If she was so unhappy and couldn't bring herself to talk to her husband about it I see two choices and both are good from his stand point. Kill herself or get a divorce and leave him alone. Maybe she will still try to "find" herself on the end of a dick, but at least it will be on her own time. And that little passive/aggressive mini smirk when he complained about the food, maybe he should help her kill herself.

5*

sometimes we just don't see what's in front of us

... it's not even a chapter ... at best it's a scene ... and by itself, utterly pointless.

I choose not to vote, rather than drag your rating down, as you can certainly write. It's a shame that you chose not to write this fully. Ah well ...

another modern woman, destroying a family on a whim.

Simply because she could. How she must have hated her husband and family.

like actions to remain un-seen, TK U MLJ LV NV

authentic, emotionally charged, well written ... Impressive. Five stars.

thought provoking - a lot said in few words

I also, would like to see more of how your characters rationalize their solutions

much more real than most of the stories i read

as i am particularly interested in the motivations of behavior rather than straight cause - effect

looking at your stories/poems page i am hopeing to do a lot of enjoyable reading

Yet another one that can't finish a story.

5* for different set up, and emotional response. drinking that much booze a week, there is definatly a problem. is that what drove the wife? I see 2 problems maybe three, starting back when wife asked to get away with hubby and he refused, the reason should have been talked about.

Not long enough to even guess on our own the ending.

She destroyed her husband, her family, her marriage why?

She felt neglected because he was busy earning them a living?

needed more to end it.

I hate how damn real this is. I celebrate your talent. You made so many emotionally immature assholes on this site raise their hand and identify themselves. You wrote the the hell out this shit. 5*

Didn't like the characters at all. The lover should been beaten half to death at a minimum. When you go to a married woman's home and have sex in her marital bed without the consent of her husband, you are playing a form of Russian roulette. Any man whether disabled or fit, they would be enraged at the knowledge of a sexual tryst with their beloved wife. This story characterized the husband as a complete idiot wimp jerk. Very unsavory characters to say the least.

but it doesn't explore enough to stand on its own. There's nothing wrong with leaving a story hanging so that readers can visualize their own endings, but this story doesn't provide enough character material to allow that.

Firstly my apologies for not having come across you and your writing before.

Secondly thank you for a well written and feeling story.

I am male but I can connect with both the characters, having celebrated 47 years of marriage, during which neither stayed "faithful" sexually, but then, we where children of the swinging sixties and lived as we wanted to live, without the hang ups of our parents or our children. At the end of the day love is the only thing that is important in a relationship not possessions or even sex.

...of course they are all male so not a surprise. Great theme.ppp

You can tell a cheating cunt wrote this garbage.

...actually I don´t understand his reaction. I would have reacted quite differently, I am sure.

This story is quite old so I doubt the author will bother to notice, but I do have something others might notice. I don't think the husband's a wimp, but I do think the wife is weak. She lacked the strength to confront her husband with her needs and fears so she turned to someone else who was ready to give her the solace she wanted. Her 'lover' may have been a sincere man, but I doubt it. The husband was blind to his wife's personal agonies. He thought he was doing what he was supposed to do; work and bring home a paycheck. He neglected her. This marriage will probably fail. I'd expect it to die a slow agonizingly painful death. They love each other, but like the broken porcelain the author described the damage is done. What we were seeing in this story was ground zero. Both people knew they'd lost. It was a tragic calamity. They both knew it. They both probably knew love would never be enough to repair the irreversible damage.

He goes to work each day, doing the same thing 100 times a day every day every year. He sees the same 5 to 20 people every day talks to the same 3 or 4 every day every year. He eats the same 5 to 10 lunches every week every year. The bosses tell him what to do when to do it how to do it every day. But she is the one that is board and jealous. She use this to justify cheating? But she was all confused, her hormones off kilter. We should have pity on her. Fuck him who cares about him anyway not her.

I enjoyed the style of your writing; I felt like I was in the room with both of them. However, the story itself left me hanging. Was she sorry for what she did; or for being caught? Is it the end for her and the well dressed man? So many questions left unanswered.

Fucking wimp cuckie crap! Real garbage. This cheating fucking cunt needs some pain and so does the man fucking her in the marriage bed. That "will call you" shit would have resulted inion mediate pain to him. This was not a first time.

I first read this story two years ago, was taken with its beauty and power, and scored it to the maximum. I came across it this morning when I noticed someone with DFW (my old home town) in his name just commented positively so I read it again.

I am still taken with the skill the writing exhibits. The imagery is constantly vivid. The poor guy carried his baggage to work every day and left wife behind. Most negative comments seem to focus on how hubby has been wronged one time. How about wifey being wronged a lifetime?

All These Years exposes and exploits both of these characters so completely, so purely. I wish I could vote again.

Extremely well written narration of one of most painful infidelity songs ever written. Thank you!

But some how very incomplete -

She acts like she loves him completely at the end - but she brings the guy to her home and their bed - the ultimate betrayal - and she equates it to his lack of motivation to do something different???

Maybe open her mouth instead of her body to let him know there are issues?? You make him sound like a guy who worked hard to manage his demons and become a better husband and father - then she does this?? no real rationale?? seems highly unlikely and incomplete.

Your writing carries great feeling and passion - I was hoping for more follow through here - she has a reason to do this to them - what is it - really - bored or cinfused does not cut it.

I understood it, but life isn't that simple. No emotion from the husband? Give me

a break,broken nose for sure, anger at least ,hurt, frustration,fear.. Having been

there, this isn't life. Not a mans reaction.

True to the song. Good job.

Not very uplifting, but a real life vignette. Fits the song. Well written. Gave it a '4'.Dan

I can understand the shock that they felt. Well written . You captured the moment. Now does someone want to end this. I say no. I do think that readers understand this tale and it is britese that may not understand the reason for some of the comments. It all about their moment too. The reader.

This is a very solid story; I think most couples have this moment ... certainly not right after being discovered in flagrante, but after they both realize that they both know what has been going on and there's no point hiding it any longer. And yet ... and yet ... they stay together like they have stayed together through anything else, because it's better to live it with them than without them.

A woman dream the beyond everything forgiving good provider husbands. This dream does not happen in the true World allways...........

Wh?

I still want to know why.

Why not talk about it first.

Why cheat?

What the fuck

I think some author like you Britease, Selena and a few others underestimate alot of your readers. A lot of commentors understand what you're trying to get across but simply don't agree with what you're saying. No one said the story wasn't well written. But as some one that deal with a lot of family issue for the military, you just don't see the husband sitting down rocking and holding the wife after she just cheated in their bed. I know some of the commentors and authors like to think they have a better insite of human nature, but untill your in that position, it's not the same. Prisons would have so many wife/husband killers if they acted like the guys in the stories, but we know the truth now don't we.

Beautifully written, beyond the comprehension of some commentators. Oh well, each to our own level. Well done Selene, great story.

Reading some of the comments was really disappointing.

To guys that can't imagine someone love his/her spouse even after seeing the spouse's betrayal: If you don't like a kind of story, well don't read from that kind. It's better for your mental health.

To guys that are looking for an ending for any story they read: Well, I think, maybe the author has had a reason for writing this story without an ending. Just think about it and try to find out what is the reason! And remember that writing stories that include definite endings is not the only style of writing.

It was nice to read a different story of yours Selena. :)

Good work.

Yikes - glad this author quit writing this garbage.

Okay, he comes home to his wife having sex in his bed and he decides to hold his wife and give her comfort? Sorry, not in my playbook.

Probably shouldn't have read this one since it hit really close to the bone. Really well written and the ache in my soul is because it resonates in me. Especially the comment that it isn't the storms that destroy us but the day to day erosion.

A wimpy cuckold husband and a slut wife with no remorse. WACC says it all

I'd rather see the story without the song lyrics. To me it's sappy and interferes with the story.

This story, by the way, was well told. It was depressing, but in the same was I was depressed when I finally decided to leave my first wife.